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My Lady
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My Lady |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
My LadyAnd it's far away from Friday in the nearness of her eyes Now she's laughing running dancing through the meadows Her memory's brought her back and for this day her sorrow dies as she flies again with songs of sonnet's sparrows And her feet are finding steps she thought they'd long ago forgot And her chest is filling deep with sea and clover And her dampened dress is flying, sheer white cotton for her wings and the fiddle, flute and whistle are her lovers And her suffering has no place beside the heathers and the sea so it stays behind and cannot call to claim her While my lady, free to frolic through her moorland memories lives and loves again where no one dares to tame her  Claire |
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Wizzard Member
since 2000-02-09
Posts 209 |
Some of these writings I have a hard time following,such as this one. The parts that I do understand, I like. Im sorry,it`s not you,it`s just that I`ve never been much of a reader till passion. Thank you for sharing this Claire.  < !signature-->Today is the first day of the rest of my life. [This message has been edited by Wizzard (edited 02-12-2000).] |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Oh Claire -- what a delightful picture you painted here! I am mesmerized! I would have to say that I would have preferred the dress to be gone (LOL -- but that's just me) but then you would have lost that lovely line about it being her wings ... never mind, leave it just as is, it's perfect! WOW!  --Kess Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Ohh....so beautiful, Meadowmuse. I absolutely love this-- And her chest is filling deep with sea and clover And her dampened dress is flying, sheer white cotton for her wings and the fiddle, flute and whistle are her lovers I could almost feel the sea spray and hear the music...exquisite. *Krista Knutson* One lives in the hope of becoming a memory. ~*Antonio Porchia*~ |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
This is lovely Claire. It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
You've created a peaceful scene here m'dear...it's definantly the line~ sheer white cotton for her wings... absolutley stunning!!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Reading this is like dancing through the meadow of your heart Wings of cotton yes she has What a nice picture you painted So light in dance and heavy on the heart Lovely, absolutly lovely ((((you)))) The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Claire, I do so like this piece - well done  ...... Roniece ....... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
The imagery is great here! I like this one! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire- I felt your spirit running free. Capturing the moment of living again. This is a wisp of lovliness. You made me see the meadow and feel the ocean spray. Everything you write is good. This one just happens to be EXCEPTIONAL ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Wizzard...do not fret, for we all have our own different perceptions and inclinations. There have been works that I did not understand, as well. Many times I will reread them, hoping for some insight...sometimes I get it, sometimes I'm afraid, I do not. I thank you, sincerely, for your very honest comments! Your candor is wonderful. Kess...thank you, so pleased to have found your "WOW!" here.  Alwye...Such a nice comment, I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and I thank you for letting me know. Tara...thank you for reading this and responding so kindly, happy to know you liked it. devina...my thanks for your comments, and so glad to share some peace with you. Helmut...so happy you enjoyed this, and thank you. ((((youtoo)))) Roniece...thank you! For reading, for responding, and for joining us here in Passions. Claire |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Claire ... I can almost picture myself drifting back in memory to the meadows beside the heather and the sea ... just to tell her how lovely she is thanks for the magical daydream Rex}<{{{{o> |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Ms.Poet deVine...Thank you! When I wrote this last night, I was hoping the imagery would work...thanks so much for letting me know it does. Marge...Yikes! Thank you for such a "demure" but "expressive" comment! {smiling} You certainly know how to deliver a message! I'm so glad to know your senses were touched by this piece...it is always my goal, when I write, to do just that. Thank you so much Marge. Claire |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Rex, thank you for the magical words...so glad you enjoyed this poem. Claire |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Claire, this is a great poem, with great imagery. I enjoyed it. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Munda, thank you for reading! So glad to know you enjoyed this. Claire |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Meadow, You have some wonderful line that titilate the reader. I really enjoyed this poem. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Clair, this poem is very mesmerizing. Doen't the passions small print say no professional's allowed. Your work is too much. I had thought I had replied to this poem before, I was remis. I must have been, mesmerized by the pic again.. Whats this line "While my lady, free to frolic" "no one dares to tame her" Where is my whip and chair, there be lions here. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Seymour...thank you for reading...I always appreciate your comments. Parker...I like knowing you were mesmerized by my words! (I think!) Thanks for reading. Claire |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Claire, this is great! Very lyrical and visual and . . .even weightless. Outstanding job! fh |
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