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My Lady

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Meadowmuse
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0 posted 02-11-2000 11:31 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse



My Lady



And it's far away from Friday
in the nearness of her eyes
Now she's laughing running dancing
through the meadows
Her memory's brought her back
and for this day her sorrow dies
as she flies again
with songs of sonnet's sparrows

And her feet are finding steps
she thought they'd long ago forgot  
And her chest is filling deep
with sea and clover
And her dampened dress is flying,
sheer white cotton for her wings
and the fiddle, flute and
whistle are her lovers

And her suffering has no place
beside the heathers and the sea
so it stays behind and
cannot call to claim her
While my lady, free to frolic
through her moorland memories
lives and loves again where
no one dares to tame her

Dear LadyClaire



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Wizzard
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1 posted 02-12-2000 12:02 AM       View Profile for Wizzard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wizzard

Some of these writings I have a hard time following,such as this one.
The parts that I do understand, I like.
Im sorry,it`s not you,it`s just that I`ve never been much of a reader till passion.
Thank you for sharing this Claire.  

 Today is the first day of the rest of my life.


[This message has been edited by Wizzard (edited 02-12-2000).]
Skyfyre
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2 posted 02-12-2000 12:29 AM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Oh Claire -- what a delightful picture you painted here!  I am mesmerized!  I would have to say that I would have preferred the dress to be gone (LOL -- but that's just me) but then you would have lost that lovely line about it being her wings ... never mind, leave it just as is, it's perfect!  WOW!  

--Kess


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

Alwye
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3 posted 02-12-2000 12:29 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Ohh....so beautiful, Meadowmuse.  I absolutely love this--

And her chest is filling deep
with sea and clover
And her dampened dress is flying,
sheer white cotton for her wings
and the fiddle, flute and
whistle are her lovers

I could almost feel the sea spray and hear the music...exquisite.


 *Krista Knutson*

One lives in the hope of becoming a memory.
~*Antonio Porchia*~
Tara Simms
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4 posted 02-12-2000 12:54 AM       View Profile for Tara Simms   Email Tara Simms   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tara Simms's Home Page   View IP for Tara Simms

This is lovely Claire.  

 It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley


devina
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5 posted 02-12-2000 01:46 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

You've created a peaceful scene here m'dear...it's definantly the line~
sheer white cotton for her wings...
absolutley stunning!!!!


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
HelmutB
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6 posted 02-12-2000 06:01 AM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Reading this is like dancing
through the meadow of your heart
Wings of cotton yes she has
What a nice picture you painted
So light in dance and heavy on the heart
Lovely, absolutly lovely
((((you))))

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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7 posted 02-12-2000 06:13 AM       View Profile for Roniece Dawson-Bruce   Email Roniece Dawson-Bruce   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Roniece Dawson-Bruce

Claire, I do so like this piece - well done
     
...... Roniece .......
Poet deVine
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8 posted 02-12-2000 10:57 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

The imagery is great here!  I like this one!  
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9 posted 02-12-2000 11:09 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Claire-
I felt your spirit running free.
Capturing the moment of living again.
This is a wisp of lovliness.
You made me see the meadow and feel the ocean spray.
Everything you write is good.
This one just happens to be
EXCEPTIONAL
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Meadowmuse
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10 posted 02-12-2000 11:14 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Wizzard...do not fret, for we all have our own different perceptions and inclinations. There have been works that I did not understand, as well. Many times I will reread them, hoping for some insight...sometimes I get it, sometimes I'm afraid, I do not. I thank you, sincerely, for your very honest comments! Your candor is wonderful.

Kess...thank you, so pleased to have found your "WOW!" here.  

Alwye...Such a nice comment, I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and I thank you for letting me know.

Tara...thank you for reading this and responding so kindly, happy to know you liked it.

devina...my thanks for your comments, and so glad to share some peace with you.

Helmut...so happy you enjoyed this, and thank you.  ((((youtoo))))

Roniece...thank you! For reading, for responding, and for joining us here in Passions.

Claire
Rex Allen McCoy
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11 posted 02-12-2000 11:19 AM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

Claire ... I can almost picture myself drifting back in memory to the meadows beside the heather and the sea ... just to tell her how lovely she is
thanks for the magical daydream

Rex}<{{{{o>
Meadowmuse
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12 posted 02-12-2000 11:23 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Ms.Poet deVine...Thank you! When I wrote this last night, I was hoping the imagery would work...thanks so much for letting me know it does.  

Marge...Yikes! Thank you for such a "demure" but "expressive" comment! {smiling} You certainly know how to deliver a message! I'm so glad to know your senses were touched by this piece...it is always my goal, when I write, to do just that. Thank you so much Marge.

Claire
Meadowmuse
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Rex, thank you for the magical words...so glad you enjoyed this poem.

Claire
Munda
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14 posted 02-13-2000 06:03 AM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

Claire, this is a great poem, with great imagery. I enjoyed it.  
Meadowmuse
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15 posted 02-13-2000 01:40 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Munda, thank you for reading! So glad to know you enjoyed this.  

Claire
Seymour Tabin
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16 posted 02-13-2000 08:59 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Meadow,
You have some wonderful line that titilate the reader. I really enjoyed this poem.
Parker
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Clair, this poem is very mesmerizing. Doen't the passions small print say no professional's allowed. Your work is too much. I had thought I had replied to this poem before, I was remis. I must have been, mesmerized by the pic again.. Whats this line "While my lady, free to frolic"
     "no one dares to tame her"

Where is my whip and chair, there be lions here.


Meadowmuse
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18 posted 02-14-2000 02:17 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Seymour...thank you for reading...I always  appreciate your comments.

Parker...I like knowing you were mesmerized by my words! (I think!)   Thanks for reading.

Claire
Fred Hobbs
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19 posted 02-16-2000 03:16 PM       View Profile for Fred Hobbs   Email Fred Hobbs   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Fred Hobbs's Home Page   View IP for Fred Hobbs

Claire, this is great!  Very lyrical and visual and . . .even weightless.  Outstanding job!

fh
 
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