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Failed Communication

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Mars
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0 posted 02-08-2000 11:08 PM       View Profile for Mars   Email Mars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mars

FAILED COMMUNICATION

A door slams shut
Out of sight
Far down the hall
Resonating long
After the act.

Tasting of
Bitter almond
Greasy to touch
A failed communication
No longer of consequence.

Mars

© Copyright 2000 Mars - All Rights Reserved
WhtDove
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1 posted 02-08-2000 11:21 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Well having been there before I can see the tension and anger. Well done!

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When you can't make up your mind
Which way is right for you,
Stop and softly ask yourself,
What Would Jesus Do?
Mistikman
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since 01-10-2000
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2 posted 02-08-2000 11:50 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

good poem. It has a nice simplicity to it that I like  

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion
Nan
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3 posted 02-09-2000 07:48 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

You say a great deal in very few words here, Mars...
"No longer of consequence"... It's sad that we get to that point, isn't it?
Toerag
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4 posted 02-09-2000 08:10 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Geesch! Your name is mars, and your poem's titled "Failed Communication"....I figured it was gonna be about another NASA screw up?...LOL
Danny Holloway
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5 posted 02-09-2000 03:50 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Sounds like a human screw up, not NASA!
If the communication gap could be solved in the game of love, it would be less of a game.
Written to the point, and point made.
Good work!
Danny
Corazon
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6 posted 02-09-2000 04:11 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

wow, good work, failed communication...just the title says a lot...and the poem follows through perfectly....been there for sure...what am I saying? been there?....I am there....sigh
Echo Rhayne
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7 posted 02-10-2000 04:55 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Short and to the point, I like it!

 Did Jesus laugh?
I think He did,
'cause He was once
a little kid;
and all of us
were made with joy
both sugar-spice girl
and snake-snail boy!
 
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