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PREACH
Junior Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 20


0 posted 2000-02-07 02:05 PM


THE MAKE UP OF A MAN


HOW MUCH IS A GOOD ONE WORTH?

WE ALL EITHER STRIVE TO BE ONE OR OBTAIN ONE FROM BIRTH.

DOES HE HAVE ALL YOU NEED, OR DO YOU NEED ALL HE HAS?

AN EASIER QUESTION TO ANSWER THAN TO ASK?

WHAT'S THE TASK?

IS IT SHOWING THE LOVE, OR LOVING TO SHOW?

KNOWING THE RIGHT TIME TO KNOCK AT THE DOOR WITH MORE.

MORE THAN JUST FLOWERS AND CANDY HE BOUGHT FROM THE STORE,

MORE THAN WHAT HE DID FOR THE GIRL NEXT DOOR.

NOT LETTING HIS GOAL BE TO GET BETWEEN YOUR THIEGHS,

BUT TO SEE, RECOGNIZE AND UNDERSTAND THE FIRE IN YOUR EYES

IN HOPES THAT YOU WILL ABLIGE AND TAKE OFF THE DESCIZE

LACED WITH LIES THAT YOU USED ON OTHER GUYS.

© Copyright 2000 PREACH - All Rights Reserved
devina
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since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539
Cali
1 posted 2000-02-07 02:08 PM


Welcome dear...I'll get back to you with and ending...but you've got a good idea going none the less!!!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

LngJhnAg
Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion
2 posted 2000-02-07 02:19 PM


Welcome aboard, Preach.  Only a couple suggestions - check yer spellin', as dere's peeple in here who spell real gud - lol.  My only other suggestion is to include in your poem something about how all us men hate cats *g*.  (Don't worry.  As you get to know me, you will come to understand my comment about cats).  I think you have a great idea going here - keep at it.
Echo Rhayne
Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
3 posted 2000-02-07 06:47 PM


welcome to passions...

 Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin*


Dr.Moose1
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since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA
4 posted 2000-02-09 07:12 PM


Welcome Preach,
I also agree that this is worth pursuing( both the poem and the subject).Asking the questions may not always get you the answer you want , but it's a start .
Doc

HelmutB
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since 2000-01-06
Posts 964
Canada
5 posted 2000-02-09 07:58 PM


Welcome to passion
The subject is a touchy one
There are no easy answers I think


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


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