Alright, I've never attempted this before, and have no clue if I've even done it. When it comes to my husband I can't ever seem to find words to write him a poem. They just don't come, but this is what did. Please let me know what you think...thanks
You have no idea those words you said to me How much they mean How long I've waited to hear them
How it has opened up a part of me And made my heart feel light again For the affection was finally behind them
How lost my soul was with out those words With a bit of meaning How alive I began to feel
Too many times in life it is taken for granted That another knows the depth of your feelings And they go unsaid
With low self esteem it is hard for me to know Hard to accept without hearing that you feel that way
For whatever reason you decided to reach out To tell me that you had eyes only for me was a blessing A long awaited blessing
That you've reached out and taken me in your arms And wrapped me in your love The love my soul has longed for For so many years
[This message has been edited by WhtDove (edited 02-07-2000).]
You've expressed your feelings - your emotions - and you've done it nicely - That's what it's all about.. As for the rules of free verse.. Pretty hard to break them when there aren't really any to break... This is wonderful, WhtDove...
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WhiteDove- This is as free as free verse can be. You did it so lovingly. How could it not be?
Free verse falls easily from the tongue or the pen. It says what 'conversation' says. Yep ! This is free verse alright ! And I'll bet you're relieved to know you didn't break any rules. NAN SAID SO ! And she knows. And that's a fact. So, it's settled.
Awwwwwwww ! Now can I say that this is just so sweet? It is ! ~*Marge*~
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Dovey, this is wonderful. Sometimes being hindered by trying to follow rhyme schemes takes away from the meaning of what one is trying to say. You have simply let your thoughts come out on paper naturally and the result is beautiful!
Well, Rebecca...I haven't a clue, as you already know, about free verse...but my friends before me do...and they agree it's wonderful free verse....I say it's a wonderful and heartfelt piece!! Beautiful Dove!!
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