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WhtDove
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0 posted 02-07-2000 12:41 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Alright, I've never attempted this before, and have no clue if I've even done it. When it comes to my husband I can't ever seem to find words to write him a poem. They just don't come, but this is what did.  Please let me know what you think...thanks


You have no idea
those words you said to me
How much they mean
How long I've waited
to hear them

How it has opened
up a part of me
And made my heart
feel light again
For the affection
was finally behind them

How lost my soul was
with out those words
With a bit of meaning
How alive I began to feel

Too many times in life
it is taken for granted
That another knows
the depth of your feelings
And they go unsaid

With low self esteem
it is hard for me to know
Hard to accept without hearing
that you feel that way

For whatever reason
you decided to reach out
To tell me that
you had eyes only for me
was a blessing
A long awaited blessing

That you've reached out
and taken me
in your arms
And wrapped me in your love
The love my soul has longed for
For so many years


[This message has been edited by WhtDove (edited 02-07-2000).]
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Denise
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This is beautiful, Rebecca! Simply beautiful!

Denise
WhtDove
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Thank you Denise!  What I wanna know is if I have actually done what is called free verse. Anyone?
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3 posted 02-07-2000 01:02 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I like this very much, Dovie... I can really identify with "Hard to accept without hearing" *S*
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4 posted 02-07-2000 01:44 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

WhtDove, I really don't know about free verse or otherwise. What I do know is that this is beautiful and so very heartfelt. -SEA
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Thanks you suthern!  It's too bad that anyone can relate to that one ya know? Hugs to ya! Thanks!

SEA thank you! What a sweet compliment! I appreciate that much.

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When you can't make up your mind
Which way is right for you,
Stop and softly ask yourself,
What Would Jesus Do?
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yes this is free verse and very beautiful...and yes, I think even when you "know" ....hearing is still nice  
Elizabeth Santos
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7 posted 02-07-2000 06:08 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

This is so lovely, and I related so well to the "low self esteem" part. That has plagued me all my life. But your poem had such a beautiful ending. Very well written
Liz
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You've expressed your feelings - your emotions - and you've done it nicely - That's what it's all about.. As for the rules of free verse.. Pretty hard to break them when there aren't really any to break...
This is wonderful, WhtDove...
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9 posted 02-07-2000 09:13 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

WhiteDove-
This is as free
as free verse can be.
You did it so lovingly.
How could it not be?

Free verse falls easily
from the tongue or the pen.
It says what 'conversation' says.
Yep !  This is free verse alright !
And I'll bet you're relieved to know
you didn't break any rules.
NAN SAID SO !  And she knows.
And that's a fact.
So, it's settled.

Awwwwwwww !  Now can I say that this
is just so sweet?  It is !
~*Marge*~



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WhtDove
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Corazon thanks so much! My first attempt and probably my last!

Thank you Liz! I've been plagued by the very same thing all my life too. Though it's gotten better but I have to say sometimes ya just need reminded! Thank you very much.

Thank you Nan! If I did good then that's wonderful. I wonder what Christopher is gonna say...hahah  Be good to me Chris!

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Free verse is poetry without form that conveys the heart's emotion..   I made that up! But seriously, this is so good dear...and I'm so happy he finally came around!  
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Well, not being a "free verse" person, I couldn't tell ya much about that.  All I can say is that this is lovely....and I think you did wonderfully.  
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Angel, this is really beautiful honey!!
You did well with free verse!!

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Michael
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14 posted 02-07-2000 10:45 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Splended free verse Rebecca.  Very beautiful and very meaningful words.  So very true to all of us.

michael
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Marge your so kind! Thank you, and I'm sorry you must have snuck in there on me on that last one! Yep, I'm relieved I didn't break any rules! LOL  Thank you Marge!

ROFL Devine! You made that up? Twas a good one at that! Thanks Sharon! I am glad to, I can't tell ya!

Sally I am not much of a free verser either. Thanks so much for your wonderful reply!

DA many thanks and hugs.

Michael thank you! It was from the heart, I had a real big blessing!    Happy as a pig wallerin...well you know the rest! haha
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Dovey, this is wonderful. Sometimes being hindered by trying to follow rhyme schemes takes away from the meaning of what one is trying to say. You have simply let your thoughts come out on paper naturally and the result is beautiful!
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17 posted 02-07-2000 11:34 PM       View Profile for Majestic   Email Majestic   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Majestic

hehehe..hit the button twice...lol...so i'll say it again...great job!

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Ditto on the don't Know anything about free verse...but this was great...makes me wanna try it...lol...

 "To live is to love; To truly LOVE is to live!" ~kg~


WhtDove
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Balladeer coming from you I know I did good.    Thank you, I really appreciate that!

Majestic go on and give a shot, from what I understand there are no rules to break. So have at it! Thanks!
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Well, Rebecca...I haven't a clue, as you already know, about free verse...but my friends before me do...and they agree it's wonderful free verse....I say it's a wonderful and heartfelt piece!! Beautiful Dove!!
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Dove words from the heart ~for someone who claims they could not find the right one's ~I don't think you left one out... a very touching verse be proud.. Bravo Gir.....

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I've not wasted one drop of ink
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WhtDove
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Pepper I guess they know better than me  
Thanks sweetie!

Tori you're making me     hehe Thanks girlfriend!
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This is beautiful Rebecca and I do hope you give it to him, it says everything it should....smiling for you right now  
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24 posted 02-08-2000 12:39 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

'Becca, wondeful, and as you know, I can relate to the 'low self-esteem' part.  Great first free verse poem, you did it and said it all so wonderfully!  *hugs*

 Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin*

 
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