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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
This is my first time posting poetry outside of Teen #2, so let me first say hello to everyone. HI  I wrote this poem about 5 minutes ago in response to a thread in the philosophy forum, hope ya like it.Day after day I hear the same, "I want a nice guy, even if plain, To him I would be a Queen, No matter what, he wouldn't be mean." I aspire to be all they crave, But am treated like some kind of knave. Over the jocks they swoon, Wanting princes but finding baffoons. Vicious cycle, never ending Lust indulged, emotions pending Try looking beyond the skin, For it is deceptively thin. I guess once we all grow older, I can be a little bit bolder, To find someone willing to be mine, Because right now, you are all wasting my time. [This message has been edited by Mistikman (edited 02-07-2000).] |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
Great poem, Mistikman....I would've given an arm and a leg to find a guy that liked poetry back in high school (which wasn't too long ago! LOL)!!!! To hear from a guy's point of view on this subject is interesting. Bobbycat |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Here! Here! *agreeing with bobbycat* I really like yer signature...  )Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
you like my signature? Thanks, I thought it up all by myself Thanks for the positive remarks, I was a little anxious about posting here, seeing as the average post is much better than in the teen forum. I thought I would be ignored for having such lackluster poetry I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
mistikman: *sniff* yet another one of the teens is posting in the grown-up forum now *wipes back a tear*... seriously though, i dont think you have to worry too much... you're stuff is always good... including this one... i read the posts in the philosophy forum and i think you do a good job expressing yourself here in fact, you inspired me to write a follow-up poem to this one... i posted in here in this forum... let me know what you think... sincerely, jerome the boy with no brain A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
No need to be nervous...we don't bite here...hard anyway!!  In reply to your poem...you lack nothing that I can see...you need to stop wasting your time with girls that take advantage of you...and one day you'll find one that praises you dear!!Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Bobbycat- Guys like me exist in every high school, we tend to not stand out though Thanks for the praise.Breathe~- likewise Jerome- Great to get a response from you, and as always thanks for the supportive remarks The teen forum will be my home for another 2 years or so, so dont worry about me leaving just yet Devina- Thanks, but I am currently interested in 1 girl, and I am not wasting my time on her. She isnt the reason I wrote this poem. Course, she still wont go out with me, but I have the big guns coming out on valentines day, so well see what happens I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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White Wolf Member
since 1999-09-18
Posts 371Somewhere in the vast wasteland |
I know the exact feeling in this poem. It wasn't until after High School that females really started to take notice of me. Either that or I was just too oblivious to realize it. I like the poem. It is good and well written. Keep it up and keep posting in here every once in a while. Atleast for me."Life's greatest mystery isn't the meaning of life. To love and be loved is the meaning of life. Now how to attain those is the greatest mystery of all." |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Welcome to open |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Mistikman, this poem was great. Good luck with the "big guns". Good guys are so hard to find, glad to know you are one. -SEA |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
I think you said this OH SO WELL! Welcome to OP6 (almost put OP5 LoL)...I enjoyed this greatly! Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin* |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to Open Forum...I like this very much. I especially like that you can express your emotions...it's a trait that girls look for in a guy, trust me!  |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Somewhere in that mess of girls, one will stand out from the crowd and see you for the gentle soul you are! Very nice poem, you write beautifully! Corinne |
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jcthaman Junior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 22Hershey, PA, USA |
hey, great poem...grrr....although i was about to write a poem almost exactly like it called "nice guys finish last", but i guess you did it better than i could  ) |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Scorched Dragon- Well, gee, I guess I will have to stick around then thanks for the support.hoot_owl_m- Why thank you, happy to be here SEA- Awww Shucks..... thanks Echo Rayne- Well hey, im still writing 1999, so we are even Thanks.Poet deVine- Oh I hope it comes soon, if I am horribly alone much longer I dont know what I will do. All this affection building up with no one to shower it on! Corinne- Yea and I think I have found her, I am now working on convincing her I am a nice guy that she would want to go out with Thanks for the reply!jcthaman- Gee, now I feel bad for stealing your thunder. I doubt yours would have been worse than mine, mine isnt that great Thanks for the positive feedback anyway I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Welcome, welcome. Very nice, indeed!!! I am emotion...spoken through words of a poet. |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
Great job Mistikman. I hope you like the fast paced life of Open. LOL. Good job as always. "WRITING IS EASY. ALL YOU DO IS STARE AT A BLANK SHEET OF PAPER UNTIL DROPS OF BLOOD FORM ON YOUR FOREHEAD." Gene Fowler |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Travis, hey I got it right this time I think you've done a great job, and I'm glad to see ya venture out over here! I agree with Devine, it is a trait women look for! <*\\\>< When you can't make up your mind Which way is right for you, Stop and softly ask yourself, What Would Jesus Do? |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Sally S.- Thanks, and cool quote, you make that up from my sig? Jer-Ahh, was wondering when you would mosey into my post to reply Thanks for the kind words, and I will try to keep up WhtDove- Why thank you, I enjoy being called by my real name j/k This poem was all on the spur of the moment too, who woulda thought people would like it so much I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Loved this ~ "Vicious cycle, never ending Lust indulged, emotions pending" I, too, am glad you've chosen to post here sometimes, although I don't get to read as much as I'd like, but will look for your work. As for this piece, you've crafted it wonderfully! Claire |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mist, Good job well done and welcome. |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Mistikman-This is a very sweet and endearing poem. I also wish I could've met someone like you in high school, most of the guys I knew I found to be superficial and immature. Trust me you have a special talent that will be appreciated by someone someday. |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Great writing. First I have seen of your work and welcome to open. Keep sharing your heart with the ladies...One will be worthy in time to keep it. Share what you are for you are what you share. Good luck There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it. |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Meadowmuse- Why thank you, I am particularly fond of those lines too Seymour Tabin- Thank you! Gemini- Heh, that seems to be a common response here, why dont you all come and go to my High School? First__Knight- Thats what I been doing in the hopes that it will eventually work. I'll keep you posted I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Well I am glad to see you expanding past teen my friend. I hope everyone treats you well and you enjoy it here. Just don't go deserting us in teen now!!..lol |
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