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suthern
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0 posted 02-06-2000 06:23 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for suthern

In the car that follows the big black hearse
There is near silence, for the people converse
In quiet whispers if they talk at all.
For the coming gauntlet has cast a pall
And there isn't much to say.
Not a person wants to arrive at the place
Where they'll share one last glimpse of a face
That's forever imprinted upon their hearts
But from which they'll now be apart
Until their dying day.
They know that their grief has merely begun
But there's nowhere to hide and they cannot run.
Cars pull off the road in a show of respect
And tears of gratitude flow unchecked
To drip off trembling chins.
The destination is reached and the hearse stops
And the heart of every passenger drops.
Even adults need a comforting hand
To help their shaking knees to stand
As the funeral begins.


© Copyright 2000 suthern - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 02-06-2000 06:39 PM       View Profile for Bbuzz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bbuzz

I can relate, Suthern, having been to a funeral recently myself. All true what you say. Well written! Thank you.
                                  Bev
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Not a nice thing to do
But a nice poem you did suthern
Remembered my Father and Mother all to well
Very good poem so much emotions


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Suthern-
Been there far too many times not to
be moved by this one.
Tastefully done.
The imagery is almost too real and
I'm transported back to tears of remembering.
~*Marge*~


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Not a nice subject, but beautifully written Suthern.  I'd rather be anywhere than saying goodbye to a loved one.  Well done  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
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5 posted 02-06-2000 07:06 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Thank you all very much... this is one of those poems started many, many years ago when I was in that car... and was finished just last week when I pulled over for the passing of a funeral procession. I wasn't sure it worked... so your kind words are greatly appreciated! *S*
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6 posted 02-06-2000 07:11 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Suthern, very heartfelt; saying good-bye is never easy and sometimes letting go never seems to happen because they stay in our hearts. Sad and beautiful.-SEA
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It works, Suthern girl. You portray the feelings and emotions very well. Thank you.
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I don't believe I've ever read anything about that time 'between'..very good..you found the emotions perfectly.  
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I can certainly understand that you couldn't finish this for awhile - but I'm glad you did - It's full of emotion - Nicely done, suthern..
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10 posted 02-06-2000 09:24 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

Sadly enough I'll be at the funeral of someone close Tuesday, but this poem will be in my head. Thanks for sharing it Suthern.
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You've captured the very essence of the experience Suthern...
Sad and moving....
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Emotions very well captured southern.....  )

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Suthern, A very difficult topic well written, and with grace
Liz
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Yes, Suthern, this is beautifully done and very moving. Great piece of writing!

Denise
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Does it work? It sure does suthern. You've grabbed every emotion and explained it so well. Great job

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Wow... thank you all very much! I'm overwhelmed... I know that I can always count on encouragement and support from some of you... but this has responses from people I thought never read my work! LOL. You are all very kind... thank you!!!  

Munda - you have my deepest sympathy and will be in my thoughts.

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wow suthern, I can't believe how perfectly you portrayed such a sad scene....great writing girl    

*sybil  

ROFGMAO and eating those dang cookies again



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Suthern,
A difficult subject but well done. Enjoyed the read. *L* Sy
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I saw everybit of this poem with incredible clarity...well done  
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Belle - This well written poem hits a little too close to home for me.  When I was in my early 20's, I was a Survivor Assistance Officer for widows of young men who died serving their country.  More than once I was in that hearse, in my Uniform, ribbons intact, I'm sure a bitter reminder of why we shared that ride.  Without the comfort of even a distant relationship to the widow and her husband's mother and father, in those darkest times of my life, what could I have said that could have helped?  I still don't know the answer.  I do know that every funeral procession that has passed by me since then has not gone by unnoticed and without regret or respect.  It is truly the hardest of times.  
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21 posted 02-07-2000 04:36 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

ROFL @ Iloveit's cookies... this poem needed a bit of levity, dear Sybil... thanks! *G*

Seymour & Hoot: Many thanks for the read and the kind comments.

LJA:  Even nearest and dearest friends are at a loss for words... so I'm not surprised you were. You want to take the pain away and know you can't... and the helpless feeling is awful. I'm sorry this brought back painful memories... but after so many years, I welcomed the opportunity to write it and get rid of it! *S*
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Belle - and I'm glad you wrote it, too.  This poem was quite lovely.
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Wonderfully descriptive poem on a universal subject! You took the reader right into that car with you.


Corinne
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This was so tastefully done. I think we can all relate to it. You wrote it so well. I must admit I read the first lines and thought I would have to leave, but I'm glad I stayed to read it all.
 
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