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forgive the interruption, figured the babe had a POV

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Tramp Poet
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Next World
The babe in the womb
in his bath does grow.
Sensing incompleteness
a break in the flow.

He wonders at murmurs
thrills to Mother’s sweet touch.
Understanding the loving
and the need to rush.

He shares the decision
to try making him whole.
At rest with the knowledge
his repairman must know.

On the day of the surgery
his world is aflame.
His heart beats furiously
as his bath is drained.

Then, oh eureka
the brillant steel enters.
Tomorrow’s portal does open
bringing coldness of winter.

He reachs to the light
tiny handfull of soul.
Knowing in the instant
he will be made whole.

Touching the hand of God
the babe rests assured.
Tucked safely back into his bath
he dreams of next world.


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Corinne
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1 posted 01-23-2000 12:12 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

DJ,

quite an astonishing and powerful piece.
I am anxiously awaiting your next post!


Corinne
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Nice to see the other side of this story...I can't imagine what the whole thing would have been like to see. An arm, the size of a pencil with a tiny hand reaching out to grasp the surgeons large hands...must have been overwhelming. I think it would have humbled everyone  
Anne
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3 posted 01-23-2000 12:41 PM       View Profile for Anne   Email Anne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Anne

What a beautiful, powerful poem!  And I love that title...so fitting...it speaks.
Tramp Poet
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4 posted 01-23-2000 12:52 PM       View Profile for Tramp Poet   Email Tramp Poet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tramp Poet's Home Page   View IP for Tramp Poet

thank you for allowing the interruption...
when i read the challenge and the beauty
of Hoot's reply..i felt an uncanny sense
of what the child must have thought...
thanks again,
b


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Romans 10:9-10
Denise
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5 posted 01-23-2000 03:45 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is great! And from the baby's perspective! Quite unique! Well done!

Denise


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Tara Simms
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Bravo!  I love this.  The image of a child, not yet born, reaching out to touch the hand of God and knowing all is safe, is overwhelming.  Beautiful, thank you for sharing this.

 It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley


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7 posted 01-24-2000 01:37 AM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

Wow Dan!! This is really intense. I never thought of it from the baby's pov.

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho


 
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