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Kevin
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0 posted 2000-01-03 08:55 PM


A morning like the ones before
grown ill with repetition.
With same old sights, my eyes grew soar
begging for  a new vision.

Till afternoon came with a site
that brought me to my knees
a brilliance in the rays of light
found me upon the breeze.

The smile that she sent my way
could stop a heart from beating
and words I struggled hard to say
to justify the meeting

she walked on bye, my eyes went low
to hold her grace forever
but images I had let go.
My heart began to sever

an evening like the ones before
grown ill with repetition
with same old sights, my eyes grew soar
than closed in self submission.


© Copyright 2000 Kevin Bednarz - All Rights Reserved
Deborah
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1 posted 2000-01-03 08:59 PM


Very nice, I especially liked the first and last part of you poem.
   Deborah

Meadowmuse
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2 posted 2000-01-03 09:48 PM


Interesting how you give the reader an intriguing glimpse into what could be symbolic of a lifetime.

Dear LadyClaire

whiskey
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3 posted 2000-01-03 11:04 PM


Wonderful poem Kevin, but then all your poems Ive read are wonderful  
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