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0 posted 12-29-1999 09:39 PM       View Profile for Helpless   Email Helpless   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Helpless

"Weird" the words muttered out of a mouth;
Whispers they say you can't hear,
But really you hear with each ear;
You think try something new will they really care?
But then they judge you by the look of your hair,
They stare and stare,
You cry and wish they didn't care;
Now I lay and cry myself to sleep,
And none cares if I weep;
I stand and look at the moon,
Wishing I would go there soon;
People point and laugh I feel less and not sure of my looks,
I hide in my books;
Hoping none will see,
And make fun of me;
The teasing and tormenting hurts,
Man I feel like dirt;
"It looks fine" they reply,
Then i begin to cry;
Self-worth i have none,
I wish I could run;
Don't hide from your fears,
"Im not" I said in tears;
Be happy not sad,
You really don't look that bad;
A brothers touch,
Helps so much;
I wish he would come to school with me,
A gentle kiss on the cheek,
Maybe I can get through the week;
There to comfort,
There to care,
He doesn't care about my hair;
I love him more then you will know,
And this love will always grow;
He says "Anymore trouble I will beat them up."
I say k I'll see what is up,
He is there through out the tough,
I know the road ahead is rough;
A month isn't that bad,
But I still feel sad;
Big bro thanks for all you do,
How can I repay you?;
You've done so much,                      
With your gentle touch;
Brian this poem is some for you,
And for others too;
A lesson to be learned,
Now it is your turn;
Help someone that needs it,
Help them so they can beat it!!!

**A gentle touch helps soooo much!!!**

[This message has been edited by Helpless (edited 12-31-1999).]
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since 11-09-1999
Posts 397
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1 posted 12-29-1999 09:41 PM       View Profile for Astraea   Email Astraea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Astraea

Very nice.  I wish I had a brother like that.  Welcome to Passions.  It's a lovely poem.


 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."

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2 posted 12-29-1999 09:49 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Welcome to Passions, Helpless! Brothers are wonderful, aren't they?!  


Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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3 posted 12-29-1999 09:53 PM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

Oh, I was once there - peers in school are more deeply cruel, I think, than anyone else in the rest of your life.  I suffered more at the hand of my classmates, as a young girl, than I ever have since, at the hands of anyone.  Try to remember that better times are coming, for sure.  And I too, am grateful for your loving brother!  I wish I had had one!

It's a wonderful thing that you are writing - painting feelings with words on the canvas of the mind is such a healing and creative thing!

 ...Living is ever like crossing rivers; finding a new life on each shore ... RJG
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since 11-27-1999
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4 posted 12-29-1999 09:54 PM       View Profile for Eloise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Eloise

Welcome to Passions, Helpless. Brothers are great. Sounds like he's in your corner.  
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since 12-29-1999
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6 posted 12-29-1999 10:38 PM       View Profile for winterinblue   Email winterinblue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for winterinblue

Keep writing, my friend, keep writing.  (Lower case is better on the net, so people won't think you're shouting, unless you ARE shouting, and in your case, you have every right to!!)

I will be watching for more of your work, and hope to see you share some more with us!

 "Through everything, remain your own good friend; and so crucially, paint it all with words!"
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since 12-28-1999
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7 posted 12-29-1999 11:05 PM       View Profile for whiskey   Email whiskey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit whiskey's Home Page   View IP for whiskey

Great poem , Brother's can be great nice thankyou to him, Welcome  

(fix some spelling, not meaning to pick)

Paul Hoekman
since 12-28-1999
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9 posted 12-30-1999 12:04 AM       View Profile for Paul Hoekman   Email Paul Hoekman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Paul Hoekman's Home Page   View IP for Paul Hoekman

  Wow you brought me back to those awkward days in High School which we all go through,
My brother and I were also close.
             No offense,
                 Maybe a hat,
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since 12-15-1999
Posts 2211

10 posted 12-30-1999 12:23 AM       View Profile for Songbird   Email Songbird   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Songbird's Home Page   View IP for Songbird

Hi, I would like to say that I enjoyed your poem, and let you in on a secret. Highschool years are the good and the bad and the ugly. One of the good things about them is that they pass, the bad thing about them is the cast system that everyone is a part of, which can give you some ugly memories. Of course it isn't all bad, there will be special memories that will always be with you. I always enjoy going back to Highschool reunions seeing how some of the most popular and esteemed people turned out and most of all spending time with the underdogs who had to work harder but basically turned out more balanced than the rest. God bless you, and have a wonderful new year.
Member Patricius
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11 posted 12-30-1999 01:38 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Welcome to passions  

One suggestion...lose the caps. On the net caps are used for shouting. Don't shout out your poetry, let it shout for itself through the words you write  
Echo Rhayne
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since 09-17-99
Posts 1538
Canyon Country, CA

12 posted 12-30-1999 06:34 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Welcome to passions, this is a great poem, but I must agre with the others, drop the caps

 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~

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