...in my boxers...
Hello Noah and I were talking, and we decided here would be a good place to venture for crituque/opinion of this alt rock/Pete Yorn style song. I'm just looking to see what you think, and improve. Thank you.
"Smile of the Heart"
Before you go baby,
before you go I wanted to tell you
I may not understand this love for you
but no, I do not regret.
It was inevitable I'd fall.
The thought you love in return
causes a smile of the heart
I've got a smile of the heart,
I may be losing you,
but I've got a smile of the heart
even without you.
I can't comprehend the return, love,
the affections you send my way
as you walk through that door.
My wish is to wake up with
a bliss bliss bliss whiff of your hair.
It won't happen love, for our pairing
seems destines to always fall free
I'll hide it away love, the passion for you.
That little, should I say large, corner
of this battered heart with your imprint,
dear ... dear, only you and I know about.
When the tears demand fuel, when
passion needs a leak, I'll have
and endless ... and endless supply.
When I need a smile, love,
I need just think of you and it's
it's just unavoidable. The best to me
be only you, the owner of my love.
Every next day we exist and ever after
I'll look forward to you, even...
even if I'll never be able to touch
be able to tough, touch you.