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when 3 chickenheads |
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dwgpoet Member
since 2007-03-05
Posts 122FL, USA |
When 3 chickenheads rolled into the room uncut. Characterizations black. Why do Doris Days get casted Oscar love scenes. Darkies get strip shows. Truth told, chickenheads often roll for cash, leaving, headless white flocks home alone; welfare white! Headless. copyright dwgpoet 2007 |
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ChristianSpeaks Member
since 2006-05-18
Posts 396Iowa, USA |
Yeah - there is a lot here in a very small space. I like it. I'm only not so into the last line of S1. It doesn't translate from what you were trying to say to what the reader reads. But S2 is great....really great. I'm not crazy about the repetition of headless in the last line. Not needed realy. But overall..quite good. Dane |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
agree completely with comment above solid -paul |
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dwgpoet Member
since 2007-03-05
Posts 122FL, USA |
Thank You Dane, and Thank You Paul. I will edit accordingly, after more thought. |
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