Please help me with a title?

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Please help me with a title?

~Allie~
Junior Member

since 2002-05-23

Posts 13
New York

0 posted 2002-08-18 01:01 PM

Whispers of sad drops cold all over me
lost in a deep empty feeling
I am one star far from its sky
I soar to a stormy sea wild with lies
Tired wind, Breathless waves

vellamike
New Member

since 2002-08-17

Posts 7

1 posted 2002-08-18 08:10 PM

The poem isnt realy quite clear, but id say somthing like..Lonliness or Alone, or Nothingness since it seems to be orientated in that direction

Radrook
Senior Member

since 2002-08-09

Posts 648

2 posted 2002-08-20 01:33 AM

How about "Cold Whispers"?

~Allie~
Junior Member

since 2002-05-23

Posts 13
New York

3 posted 2002-08-20 12:31 PM

Hey, you know what I noticed when i re-read my poem after I posted it.. the whole poem is not here, sorry..

If someone could please tell me how too edit my poem, id love to share the rest with you.

Not A Poet
Member Elite

since 1999-11-03

Posts 3885
Oklahoma, USA

4 posted 2002-08-20 01:20 PM

Allie, you only get about one day to edit a post. It's already too late for that. It's all right if you want to just repost it in it's entirety. You might put something in the subject line to indicate that.

Pete

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