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My Ocean Deep
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My Ocean Deep |
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The Napkin Writer Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 70 |
My Ocean Deep At low, does my soul rapture deep! For the vacancy which lay upon my heart, has cause me faint My appetite is no more, shall I eat, nor shall I sleep, ever! In the twilight of the hour again I need to be anywhere, from where I am now I shall climb into a shell, and throw myself upon the sea! I will settle at the ocean's floor, and dwell, in the mist, of a quite form Look upon me now, for the last time in this way For when you lay eyes upon me again, I shall be arisen, from my shell, without a remembrance of you! So hold now for the last time in your heart, the passions of ones love And seek me not, on the oceans’ floor, among the scavenges For you will find me not, there are too many, of me there! As years pass by, I will ferment inside my shell And on the day of my return, I, shall be a pearl Lustering in beauty, fit for my place, in the garden And once again, I will live abundantly With the spirits, of the old, and of the new And lay upon my tree, that was rooted, so soon, long ago….. I will seek not again, to appease my heart, in the company of beings! Least, they come by way of the spirits! Woe is me That I should live such a cursed, yet blessed life! Cursed by beings, and blessed by souls What is this place, my soul, has settled at? That they knowest not, the love of the ages? Teach me my Lord, that I may never, walk this way again! Arise my child, from the oceans’ depth! © 1998 |
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renathon Junior Member
since 2002-06-09
Posts 23 |
I shall refer to the character as a female. I think this poem is about falling out of love or getting your heart broken and wanting to disassociate from all the things that remind you of that person. The shell represents this person's "safe" place and the bottom of the ocean is just a calm place where she can forget about the pain from her past life. Evidence that she is talking about a person who has done something to her is found in the line, "For when you lay eyes..." This is a final utterance of anger towards this person by the character, maybe even her last hope that he will change his mind about something. Why would she even talk to him about her "changing" if she didn't hope even a little that he would turn around and say, "no no, I'm sorry, don't forget about me." She says to him to not seek her out when she has forgotten about him, (when she goes to forget at the bottom of the ocean), that she will be different and unavailable than when he knew her and he will not be able to recognize her. The character in this poem, the girl, has apparently lost her will to do something and will never try to do it again. I'm assuming she is discouraged about love and doesn't want to need a partner anymore; this last heartbreak was too painful and she doesn't want to feel the pain anymore. Evidence of this desire to be free of the need for a partner is found where it says, "I will not seek again, to appease my heart, in the company of beings!" which very obviosly proves that after she has had time to think ("Ferment") she will be free from the need to be commited to something. Th last lines make me doubt my idea that this poem is about heartbreak. "Teach me my lord, that I may never, walk this way again!" seems to point out to me that the character has sinned in some way and she simply does not want to fall into a sinful path ever again. My last idea is this. The character has fallen in love with evil (or the devil), which is represented by a human form. The poem is her awakening, her realization that she should not be living her evil ways and she desires to leave her old ways behind. When she arises "from the oceans' depth!" she is purged of her past sins (her past loves/addictions) and can walk among others without being tempted by the evil which she once loved. ///As luck has it, I have a tendency at being way off when it comes to explaining poetry. I like the poem very, very much and would love to know if I hit the mark with my analysis of its meaning./// lordrenathon@yahoo.com / members.cox.net/lordrenathon |
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The Napkin Writer Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 70 |
For the most part you hit the point, but don’t be trying to make a girl out of me! Okay? Don’t forget that men feel these things too, although most would have you believe otherwise! Once I got over the lies about men not crying and the notion of my buddies laughing, my poetry became less confining of the nonsense we place on each other’s lives. And yes, nobody wants to fall in love with monsters anymore, no matter how they wear their hair…….. Originally Yours, |
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renathon Junior Member
since 2002-06-09
Posts 23 |
The chances were against you man, sorry. Your poem rocks even more now though. |
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