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Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

0 posted 2000-07-08 03:42 PM


I sat outside in the sun writing this one as nature
harmonized in my ears, and brought the thoughts
flooding into my mind. I have some ideas for the title, but not sure which is best. I appreciate any help I can get, usually I don't get stumped like this.  

The silence
of a minute
blase
in solitude
of harmony.
Then to hear
natures language
all amass
together in unison,
ones song
inspiring another
till there's a serenade
of beauty.

Magically
they've got me
entranced
in their universal
dialog of love,
enchanting each other
with another song
like all that matters
is right now,
tomorrow is not
in their vocabulary
this moment of feeling
is their only reason.

One day man
may realize
the true essence
to loving
one another
comes from depth,
not in what will you
give me in return,
but in what can I give
that would compliment.
What depth of beauty
can I reflect upon
that will make
all your tomorrow's
disappear?

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brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
1 posted 2000-07-08 03:56 PM


titles,

Summer reflections
(I love the word reflection lol).

solitude of harmony.

Midsummer revelation.
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I think secretly that I hold out on title suggestions incase I think of a really good one and then feel bad about not suggesting it LOL.

Anyway whatever the title is a beautiful piece flows wonderfully and gently like a cool summer breeze, whispering wisdom. excellent poem.  





"Death makes angels of us all and put wings where we once had shoulders, smooth as raven's wings. Jim Morrison

midnightblues
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since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597
Singapore
2 posted 2000-07-09 05:49 AM


Love it! Hmmm I agree with brian...reflections seem like the right word! *S* keep posting keep posting!! *huGz*

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

kelieth
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since 2000-06-12
Posts 314
Normal IL - USA
3 posted 2000-07-09 10:51 AM


I was thinking 'Essence of hearts'
or 'Serenede of Beauty'

Which ever title you choose.  The work is amazingly serene.   Great job.  

Kevin

"Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals."

Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

4 posted 2000-07-09 03:24 PM


How about 'Enchanted Moment'? Beautiful poem, Gloria!

Denise

JOY 14
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since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
5 posted 2000-07-09 10:26 PM


This reminded me of a qoute I read recently..."Nothing matters more than this day"  I don't know who said it, but it's now one of my favorites.  This poem describes the beauty of a moment in nature well, beautifuly.  

I like all the titles suggested.  I can't think of one myself though. Like you, drained for ideas!  Would it be so bad to leave it titless?  Whatever you choose, it won't change the poem, which I loved, can you tell?   Smiles to you!

Joy

White Knight
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since 2000-03-14
Posts 92

6 posted 2000-07-09 10:58 PM


Lost Dreamer,
How 'bout "Natures Serenade"?
This is what came to mind for me LOL
The White Knight


[This message has been edited by White Knight (edited 07-09-2000).]

kaile
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since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146
singapore
7 posted 2000-07-10 07:05 AM


Personally, i like Midsummer revelation...seems to me to sum up this poem best..a vital life's message understood(Seize the day as it is) in the midst of nature's beauty....if only i were to be inspired similarly so!!hmmm....
toes21
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since 2000-07-09
Posts 24

8 posted 2000-07-10 03:41 PM


Deep tried and true, is much of the content in your poem, a pleasure to have read it.
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