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blackhalo
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since 2000-02-15
Posts 467
Denver, CO

0 posted 2000-05-15 01:29 PM


The light is blinding
Although it is dark

I'm a very sound sleeper
Yet I hear you shrill screams

I might be smiling
But the pain is sharp

You call my name
Yet you don't speak

I see your face everywhere
Although you are not there

Apparently it was a waste
To love you with my heart

Because to me it seems
You really do not care

Once our love was strong
But now I cry in despair

Why couldn't you keep loving me
For eternity?


I wrote this 2 years ago.  As you can see, my writing has desperatly improved.  Luv Y'all, you are just like my family!
Alicia A. Renzelman

© Copyright 2000 Alicia R - All Rights Reserved
Wobbly Head Bob
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since 2000-05-15
Posts 299
Virginia, USA
1 posted 2000-05-15 01:39 PM


This all sounds very confused, upset, and obviously heartbroken.  You've managed to convey many feelings, without saying you're sad or angry...that is what creative expression is all about.  Again you hint to the ideal society with eternal love, you make it apparent though that isn't always possible, and still for it you cry.  Yours is the voice of many, thank you for the read.
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