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Wobbly Head Bob
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since 2000-05-15
Posts 299
Virginia, USA

0 posted 2000-05-15 11:18 AM



I woke alone again today
Doesn't matter anyway
At all
I took myself down to the bay
Don't believe a word I say
So long

I can't believe that this is me
I'm all I'll ever be
At all
Still there's something that I need
Someone to set me free
So long

And I'm stuck within the beams
Its tearing up my seams
I'm gone
Still sinking in these streams
Lost somewhere deep in my dreams
I'm gone

I sleep alone again today
I'm not tired anyway
At all

Need someone to set me free
Keep me from leaving me
But I'm gone


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Alle'cram
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since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816
Texas
1 posted 2000-05-15 11:49 AM


WHB, You did a great job capturing emotions with this one. So Sad. Someone will come along for the subject of this poem. Lovely written. marcy
Wobbly Head Bob
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since 2000-05-15
Posts 299
Virginia, USA
2 posted 2000-05-15 12:00 PM


Thanks very much, and   I'm sure my someone is out there, thanks for the optimistic view!
patricianne
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since 2000-05-04
Posts 66

3 posted 2000-05-15 07:14 PM


Hi WHB, I read all of your poems (so far), and really like your style.  I will try to find the time to comment on each one. I'm new here too, finding it lots of fun. Keep writing!!
Wobbly Head Bob
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since 2000-05-15
Posts 299
Virginia, USA
4 posted 2000-05-17 12:05 PM


Thanks Patricianne, I'm glad you liked it.  As far as "my style" goes you'll see with the other 5 or 6 I have floating around here that its really varied...I haven't settled into just one!  Thank you again, as one Newbie to another!
Denise
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5 posted 2000-05-17 12:23 PM


Very nice, WHB!

Denise

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