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wonderous
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since 2000-02-29
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0 posted 2000-03-14 07:33 PM


your lips so tender
the stars explode
as the tongues mate
moist kisses follow
contours of my neck
the bittersweet pleasure
of pain and desire
as you sink your teeth
into my flesh
the tongue blazes
a trail of fire
your voice sends me
spiralling higher
hot from wanting you
i writhe in agony
tempting you with words
you silence with your lips
your hands talk
i am out of control
you dont stop
i beg
you laugh
i await your possesion

when, my love
when?


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Gene
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since 2000-01-23
Posts 935
Colorado, USA
1 posted 2000-03-14 09:00 PM


When?  Probably anytime you want. Excellent, very sensuous poem. You got me hot just from reading it.  

~Gene

Wikket
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since 2000-01-29
Posts 340
Santa Clara, CA USA
2 posted 2000-03-14 09:05 PM


*sigh* been there and done that...GOD I wish I was still there!  Great Work!!!  You got me right there in the moment!       --Jamie


 "You make it hard to breathe
It's as if I'm suffocating
And when you're next to me
I can feel you're heart beat through my skin
It makes me sad to think this could all be for nothing
I wish there was a way
A way for you to see inside me
I've never felt this way
About anyone or anything
Tell me
What do I have to do?
To make you happy
What do I have to do?
To make you understand
What do I have to do?
To make you want me
But if I can't make you want me,
What do I have to do?"
'What do I have to do?'by Stabbing Westward

Denise
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3 posted 2000-03-14 09:28 PM


very passionate poem! Well written!

Denise

Jonas
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since 2000-03-03
Posts 796
Oregon
4 posted 2000-03-14 09:35 PM


This is a very sensual....great read!
wonderous
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since 2000-02-29
Posts 75

5 posted 2000-03-15 02:20 AM


thanx everyone
i just wrote it last night
wasnt sure of it

tom
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since 2000-01-26
Posts 90
s/w penna u.s.a.
6 posted 2000-03-15 04:43 PM


Very hot, very very hot
Brenda Winniford
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 31

7 posted 2000-03-15 04:52 PM


Wounderous,

I thoroughly enjoyed your poem entitled "When"

It has been such a long time for one to hold me close,and tell me they felt passionate.

Thank you for sharing your poem with the world!

May the angels watch over you

Brenda W.

wonderous
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since 2000-02-29
Posts 75

8 posted 2000-03-16 02:42 AM


thanxs tom, brenda
Jon Mewett
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since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304

9 posted 2000-03-16 04:50 AM


Wow!!!!

Jon

Little_Spyro
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since 2000-01-09
Posts 659
San Diego, CA, USA
10 posted 2000-03-19 02:45 AM


You know, I think I'm getting red right now after reading this...I don't know if anything I could say could quite cut it, but I'll try...
"This deserves to be framed!" lol  
Beautiful poem!!  

Little Spyro T. Dragon

childomine
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 818
st. petersburg, FL
11 posted 2000-03-20 12:26 PM


As Jon & Tom said - WOW!  HOT!!!  This isn't just sensuous.  This is wonderfully written light (??) erotica!!
wonderous
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since 2000-02-29
Posts 75

12 posted 2000-03-20 05:41 PM


thanks
jon, Little_Spyro, childomine
this poem surprised me too

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