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rich-pa Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317New Orleans, Louisiana |
'ah weep fo' what we done los' what mah' fam'ly done los'. 'ah weep fo' da loss of knowledge -how da ol' people speak an' 'ah neva' understan' mah' people an' i not know'n' what we ought we done learn' 'bout our lan' da swamp an' da water how ta hunt it how ta fish it how ta ten' it ta our survival but what 'bout our tradition? an' our value? an' our hist'ry? an' our language? all dis we done forgot yet we cry out in da tongue o' other people's forefather "we are acadian da hunters da fishers da leg'cy o'Louisiane! an' one o' 'dese day we will got wha' we done los' once again!" [This message has been edited by rich-pa (edited 02-17-2000).] |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Ah say, ah say sihr, datsa mytah fine poem ya dun rote dahr. How 'bout call'n it, "Bayou Bah Me" ? ~Gene |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Oh my goodness, this is too much for my Dutch mind ! LOL I think I like what I just read, but can't be sure !  |
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rich-pa Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317New Orleans, Louisiana |
sorry 'bout dat munda. i was going for the thick accents associated with my people(the cajun french). i left out a lot of it fearing it would be too thick for anyone to comprehend. rich-pa |
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Another Heather Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 93Canada |
hi! great poem. it`s always fun reading these things outloud. as for a title suggestion the only thing that came to mind is "What we know" or i guess "Wah we knaow" or something. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is SO great..creative and FUN!!! love the ethnic flavor...made me hungry for gumbo!! enjoyed this..janet marie "Bring it on baby what you getting into... I swear at once it was the little things that mattered-- But it all seems true to you. Say the hell with my name and say the hell with my picture... but swear, for the one time you need me around. And here I'll stand like it matters... Only once love gets through then gets scattered by the rain... But pain gives me the right to be unkind"... Tabitha's Secret |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
It doesn't matter rich-pa  I like different things, even if I don't comprehend it fully  |
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rich-pa Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317New Orleans, Louisiana |
just for you munda, the grammatically correct version: i weep for what we have lost what my family has lost. i weep for the loss of knowledge -how the old people speak and i never understand my people and i not knowing what we should we've learned about our land the swamp and the water how to hunt it how to fish it how to tend it to our survival but what about our traditions? and our values? and our history? and our language? all of this we have forgotten yet we cry out in the tongue of other people's forefathers "we are acadian the hunters the fishers the legacy of Louisiane! and one of these days we will have what we lost once again!" |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
I enjoyed this piece very much. The way you tried to bring your reader to Louisiana was great. As far as a title I don't know maybe something like "Return of the Legacy" |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Suggestion - "ah is aweepin'" Excellent material here I enjoyed it |
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Bbuzz Member
since 1999-12-17
Posts 76Washinton State |
How about " Weep Fo' Da Los' Leg'cy". I wish I could see what you left out! |
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tom Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 90s/w penna u.s.a. |
How about "listen to whats said" just a thought. |
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Exile Junior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 42 |
Monsieur, as a historian, and as my family's genealogist, this is a very moving piece. It would be presumptuous of me to suggest a name for it; but may I suggest that the name at least should be in Cajun French? Having heard the dialect that you're so ably transcribing, I miss only the French words thrown in two or three to a sentence, that I'm used to hearing. I hope that you and your family are doing what you can to salvage and preserve your traditions and heritage, for those who come after. This is one of the things that I've devoted my life to, although my background and traditions are much different (a farm family in rural northern Michigan). The best of fortune to you, Monsieur, in passing this on to the future. |
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rich-pa Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317New Orleans, Louisiana |
and on that note exile, i transcend the levels of normal titles' and move into the world of cajun french. thanks. |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Well, some people above said that they couldn't really understand this...well, I did! Beautiful piece you've got here, rich-pa! I can almost feel what was lost. Thanks for the excellent read! Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderful poem, Rich! I enjoyed this! Denise |
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Beverly Member
since 2000-02-19
Posts 123New Mexico |
Rich-pa...Lov'ly poem. Such insight to your heritage quest. After reading, I found myself pondering about my own Irish/German ancestry. Quite moving. I am not too familiar with the cajun dialect, but like several of the other readers...would like to see a few of the french words incorporated into the poem. That way I, as the reader could "feel" a little more of the cajun flavor. Truly enjoyable reading...Thank you! I like your style. |
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rich-pa Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317New Orleans, Louisiana |
alright, i know bits and pieces of cajun french but not enough to do what i want, anyone who know french please e-mail me at beatknght richpa@aol.com. |
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