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Dancing Leaves

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RSEvans
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0 posted 11-29-1999 12:10 PM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for RSEvans

Delicate leaves, now brown with age
Fall silently from their lofty height,
And Fall turns like a books' page
As Summer fades from our sight.
I look for your smile in Autumn's leaves
Falling, turning in the wind,
And pause a while to feel the breeze
As they drift off round the bend.
The leaves find the river in its slowing flow
And float upon the water, drifting
Round and round and to and fro
Dancing gracefully before sinking.
I watch their dance and there it is
The smile I've been searching for
Even in death they dance like this
Swirling with passion at death's door.
It is as though you've returned this year
To grace me with your smile,
And even though I know your gone
I can pretend for a while...

I can pretend and watch the dancing leaves.


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Once I was brilliant, now I no longer shine, but the twinkle in my eye speaks of another time.
© Copyright 1999 Rob Evans - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 11-29-1999 01:39 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Excellent imagery, Robert. I can see the dead leaves falling, being blown into the water, drifting and then sinking, signalling the end of an era, one which will begin anew in the warmth of Spring...ah, the cycles of life.
Martie
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2 posted 11-29-1999 02:05 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Beautiful imagery here and touching emotion.
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3 posted 11-29-1999 02:20 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Well done!
lostboy
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4 posted 11-29-1999 02:24 PM       View Profile for lostboy   Email lostboy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lostboy

I liked this this very much also. Nice work!!
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5 posted 11-29-1999 08:09 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Beautiful, Robert. Yes, they are beautiful even in the face of death. I loved the imagery in this and the message. And I am a strong believer in pretending...at least for now. I couldn't have expressed my feelings any better than you have here. Thank you.

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Denise

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6 posted 11-29-1999 08:11 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Gorgeous, gorgeous, gorgeous - can't say it enough. So evocative. I love 'The leaves find the river in its slowing flow'. Well done.
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7 posted 11-29-1999 08:23 PM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

Thanks all! Hope you had a nice Thanksgiving and are looking forward to Christmas...
Ohme
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8 posted 11-29-1999 09:27 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

Lovely poem. I like best I look for your smile in Autumn's leaves.
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9 posted 11-29-1999 09:29 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

RS, this was an awesome poem. I like the comparison of the fallen, dancing leaves to the person who has gone...beautiful.

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Nail to the mast her holy flag,
Set every threadbare sail-
And give her to the god of storms,
The lightning and the gale!
-Oliver Wendell Holmes
RSEvans
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10 posted 11-30-1999 11:17 AM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

Thanks again all...this poem is actually about my dad. I had a chance to use metaphor here moreso than in "To the Cabinetmaker". Nature was his favorite thing and he loved the Autumn colors.
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11 posted 11-30-1999 11:40 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Love the imagery...and this is a gorgeous piece Robert......

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12 posted 12-01-1999 02:53 PM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

really nice work, I loved this
WhtDove
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13 posted 12-01-1999 03:20 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Wonderful imagery! I loved it!
Seaangel
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14 posted 12-01-1999 06:13 PM       View Profile for Seaangel   Email Seaangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seaangel

I know I'm just echoing everyone else, but i had to put my oar in and repeat 'wonderful' & 'lovely' again. Am waiting for more.
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15 posted 12-01-1999 06:47 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

RSEvans,
I think Balladeer said it best, good job.
Sunshine
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16 posted 12-01-1999 08:23 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Amazing how melancholy, but beautiful, Fall really becomes when seen through your eyes...
hoot_owl_rn
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17 posted 12-01-1999 11:00 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Wonderful imagery and it flows so smoothly
RSEvans
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18 posted 12-02-1999 12:06 PM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

Thanks again everyone. You don't know how much value you give to my poetry. It really has no deeper meaning than when my friends read it and comment.
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19 posted 12-02-1999 03:07 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Ah gees Robert, this is breathtaking....I too, think Balladeer said it best, (he is so darn good with words!) and I knew it was for your father as soon as I started reading it! It is absolutely exquisite, you certainly have done him proud by writing something so beautiful with him in mind...I too, love the colors of fall, and the way they finally turn loose and dance and sway before touching the ground......what beautiful imagery here. I could actually see them falling as you wrote....Thank you for sharing something so personal with us...

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~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale

Sally S.
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20 posted 12-02-1999 03:14 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

Well, it seems all the best adjectives have been used. This was so lovely....a grand tribute to your father.
A poem that you can see, hear, smell or feel is the best poem of all. You've got that here. Wonderful.
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