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Teen Poetry #2

Broken Down Reflection

Marisa
New Member

since 1999-12-07

Posts 2

0 posted 1999-12-08 12:42 PM

Broken Down Reflection

*The mirror has cracked
along with my heart.
I knew it was wrong
right from the start.

*It's done and over
it's in the past,
You and I
Would never last.

*The reflection is broken
I can't make it out,
I'm standing right there,
but what's this about?

*I looked harder
and all I see,
is the broken down reflection
of the lonely me.

Star Fairy 2
Member

since 1999-09-06

Posts 260
cerritos, california, usa

1 posted 1999-12-08 12:48 PM

goodjob...

JEBE
Junior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 32
WILMINGTON, NC, USA

2 posted 1999-12-08 06:01 PM

ITS TRUE WHEN SOMEONE DOESN'T SHARE YOUR FEELINGS YOU FEEL LONELY IT WOULDN'T BE NORMAL IF YOU DIDN'T I LOVE THE WAY YOU DESCRIBED WHAT YOU WERE FEELING NOT REALLY DESCRIBED IT BUT LET US KNOW HOW YOU FELT..IT TOUCHED MY HEART GOOD JOB..

poetry_kills
Senior Member

since 1999-12-04

Posts 549
new orleans

3 posted 1999-12-08 06:07 PM

marisa ~ your poem is good, i just had one question... is the mirror simply a metaphor, or were you actually looking into a cracked mirror when the idea for the poem came to you... i just wondered... hope to hear more of your work soon...

sincerely,
**jerome the boy with no brain

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

4 posted 1999-12-08 09:46 PM

Welcome. I like this a lot. You did a good job!

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