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Teen Poetry #2

Into the Unknown

HCwildchild
Member

since 1999-09-03

Posts 55
Pennsylvania,USA

0 posted 1999-11-08 06:36 PM

Into the Unknown

Lighting strikes lighting the sky,
And for a moment I saw you there.
Your beauty was seen through my deep blue eyes,
And I no longer felt any fear.
Then comes the rain again, soaking my skin
All the way down to the bone.
Oh how I wish I was safe and warm inside my cozy home.
With you there by my side holding me so tight,
Love's flame heating up the cold harsh night,
But you aren't here, so I walk alone,
Out into the darkness,out into the unknown.

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Heather C.

Laura Mitchell
Member

since 1999-11-05

Posts 76
Cincinnati OH,45238

1 posted 1999-11-08 06:53 PM

Your poem creates quite a picture! Super Job!!

HCwildchild
Member

since 1999-09-03

Posts 55
Pennsylvania,USA

2 posted 1999-11-09 07:12 AM

Thanx Laura, I'm glad you liked it

I was in a weird mood when writing this one, but I thought it came out ok

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Heather C.

kari
Member

since 1999-10-03

Posts 104
Hyde Park, Ut, USA

3 posted 1999-11-09 06:09 PM

Very nicely written! When you're reading it you can actually feel like you're there. The last line was really good.

Systematic Decay
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

4 posted 1999-11-09 07:56 PM

Nice.....very well written.

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.

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