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hard enough"-read and reply!!!

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darksideofthesun
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0 posted 10-23-1999 01:40 PM       View Profile for darksideofthesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for darksideofthesun

cut the deck and deal it blind
transparent's hard to have to find
ice is warm when we are cold
invisible's hard to have to hold
smiles hard enough to bequeath
when there's nothing underneath
hard to have faith in things above
when there's nothing left to love
sleep, baby, sleep
the days seem longer when you weep
cry, baby, cry
the river rages, bleeding dry
it's hard enough to be a saint
when everyone has lost the faith
hard enough to face the fears
when the illusions disappear
hush, now, bow your head
there are worse things yet to dread.
© Copyright 1999 darksideofthesun - All Rights Reserved
Skyfyre
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1 posted 10-23-1999 01:43 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Interesting. Quite a disturbing lullaby.

--Kess

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You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.
Watcher666
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2 posted 10-23-1999 02:53 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Liked this much!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
Marilyn
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3 posted 10-23-1999 03:36 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

I do very much like the theme of this work. i was just wondering if the meter is different on purpose? I found myself stumbling at some places. I am no expert on meter, I jst wondered if it was done on purpose?
darksideofthesun
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4 posted 10-23-1999 04:18 PM       View Profile for darksideofthesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for darksideofthesun

actually, this was just one of those poems i started writing in the middle of 2nd period geometry and once i started, things just came popping into my head. im trying to figre out some music to maybe turn it into a song, but i kindof shifted the meter's a bit and even im not quite sure why. still working on it- if you could provide suggestions/advice, let me know!thanks!!!
 
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