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Ohme
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0 posted 10-22-1999 03:55 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Ohme

Remembering

I sit and hold your hand and watch you slowly slip away.
Each hour added to your life is like another day.
For in these precious moments we relive our memories.
And even spend some time recalling our tempestuous seas.
Here come tears of sorrow now, your life is almost gone,
and I remember happy days, as you try to hang on.

But now let's talk about the cats and dogs, the pets we've had,
and in the midst of sorrow, find a moment to be glad.
Then as hours dwindle, we'll walk closer in the past.
And when your life is over, we'll have reached today at last.
Our life together was so short but lived so wonderfully.
We had a chance to live it twice, together you and me.

[This message has been edited by Ohme (edited 10-22-1999).]

[This message has been edited by Ohme (edited 10-22-1999).]

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© Copyright 1999 Lorene Meadows - All Rights Reserved
Watcher666
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1 posted 10-22-1999 04:14 PM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Touched me deeply.Loved this.

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Ohme
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2 posted 10-22-1999 05:20 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

Thanks, Watcher. Even Heartache can have its moments.
Thanks for your comment
PhaerieChild
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3 posted 10-22-1999 05:59 PM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

Ohhh...this is poignant and beautiful. I don't think I could let go so gracefully.

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4 posted 10-22-1999 06:08 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Ohme, in the right light and sense, even a passing can be a good time to look back upon, especially when you know you've done your best to give love.

Thank you.

(P.S. - change "have" to "had")
Munda
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5 posted 10-22-1999 07:54 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

It touched me deeply. Beautiful.
Michael
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6 posted 10-22-1999 07:59 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Beautiful, beautiful poem. Memories are a powerful thing...especially for one who realizes their making them.

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Is all that we see or seem
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Denise
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7 posted 10-22-1999 08:30 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This has to be without a doubt the most beautiful poem on someone in the process of dying that I have ever read. It is beyond my ability to find the words to express how deeply this has touched my soul. Thank you for writing this and sharing it.

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8 posted 10-23-1999 08:59 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

This is very special, Ohme - Anyone who's been there can certainly feel the impact of every word. Thanks for putting it to poetry...
 
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