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Who Will Be King ( With Reluctance)
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Who Will Be King ( With Reluctance) |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Wary of ill-fated choices Hold fast to inner voices wrath Only those slated to do gallant deeds , lo Will seek the path of valiant Zulu In fire of truth face fear denial Laughter springs from crises passed Lesser hero's fears exiled , I Battle fate of haste judgements cast 'Ere await dark minions mob Klinging doubts thrust far aside If mere power of thought hath built this realm. No breach of such will I abide Grant me the yoke of benevolence ? Oracles speak of where I follow Night hides sorrow of deeds un-done , I Long for the freshest steed on the morrow, still Yearn victory's cup to swallow from , will... All foes vanquished from the past Form ranks with those un-met yet near One last go with no regrets may Often shed more than blood or tears ,at... Light's last waning rays I'll go As reining days sleep soon forever Still with-in my heart I've known,Valiant Zulu Marching ever remaining tall Even though my worth I cannot prove ------------------ Sometimes nonsense isn't . |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is great! I loved it! ------------------ Denise |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Well Done.....this piece I enjoyed much Dr. Moose....... ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Thank you both , This double acrostic started out to be something else , and then kind of had it's way with me |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Liked this much! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Wonderfully done Dr. I look forward to more of your work. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Watcher and Marilyn , Thanks for the comments . much appreciated . |
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Craig Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 444 |
Well written Acrostic, thanks for not announcing it in the title it's much better to find out on your own. ( Or to be told later and feel a fool for missing it! I saw the acrostic in this but missed the double by being thrown by the excellent use of the question mark ) . Well done DOUBLE! ------------------ Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool: But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Nothing to be reluctant about here, Dr. Very well done...and I can appreciate the difficulty involved in a piece such as this. ------------------ Michael Anderson Is all that we see or seem but a dream within a dream? |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow! Am I embarrassed! Me, the lover of acrostics! Me, the one who usually reads down the left side first! And a double no less! I was carried away by the beauty of the text and didn't even notice! What can I say but MOST EXCELLENT!  ------------------ Denise |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
All men are kings until they lose their kingdoms...but I doubt many are fools..  HUGS ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Craig, Michael, dsnyder, Rainbow, Thanks for the reviews , I must admit that I am flattered . Having read some of your works makes your comments more meaningful. And, I'll also admit to not announcing it , to see who would pick it up right away. |
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