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Tormented Love, Triumphant Hate

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Ron
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0 posted 08-15-99 06:58 PM       View Profile for Ron   Email Ron   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Ron's Home Page   View IP for Ron

Since I absolutely hate empty forums, I'm posting the only poem I have that seems to fit within the realm of Fantasy & Fancy. You can blame this post on one of Poet deVine's challenge phrases...

Tormented Love, Triumphant Hate


They came to Earth from distant stars,
Bright angels of the hidden skies,
Our brothers, sisters, from afar,
Their silken tongues wrapped round their lies.

Enchanted was their lilting voice,
Perfection surpassed was their form,
Seducing all of human choice,
Their peace the calm before the storm.

Three score and five they massed in all,
Dark angels from the darkest space.
Love their weapon and their call,
Nothing greater could we face.

Pheromones some few would say,
Telepathy some would contend,
Magic might have been their way,
It mattered not in tragic end.

Within a moon they ruled us all,
Directed, beckoned, with soft glove,
Like lemmings led to our own fall,
Fond victims of tormented love.

Our aged first to feel their sting,
No good purpose found could they serve,
So death was ordered on silent wing,
Euthanasia was the common word.

The feeble next and then the sick,
Pushed to their death by velvet glove,
We turned our eyes to who was picked,
Fond victims of tormented love.

Three years and one passed like a flood,
The angels spoke and all would bow,
They culled their herds with flowing blood,
Only the strong could serve them now.

In silent homage, still we served
Mystic angels from above,
Listening to their every word,
Fond victims of tormented love.

Our children next came to the fore,
Those born too small, infirm or weak.
And cries arose from those who bore
The effronteries of the meek.

More children died, more voices rang,
And angels moved to quell the tide.
But anger swelled and fiery sang
Of our approaching genocide.

The war was fought without a gun,
No thoughts of bombs above,
But bricks and bats and silent men
Reliving their tormented love.

Perfect voices spoke not words,
But screams that rent the night,
And perfect forms of perfect lords
Were shreds when came the light.

The angels learned what Earth could tell,
A tale of man's historic fate:
There's a fine line 'tween Heav'n and Hell
And finer still 'tween Love and Hate -

Tormented Love, Triumphant Hate.

© Copyright 1999 Ron Carnell - All Rights Reserved
Nan
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1 posted 08-15-99 07:46 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

You know, I recall that you had written this poem for deVine's challenge, but I never had the opportunity to actually read it...It's wonderful, of course... ... Yet another corner of that wonderful mind of yours unfolds.. ..Got any more I haven't seen?



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Nay, if our wits run the Wild-Goose chase, I am done:
For thou hast more of the Wild-Goose in one of thy wits,
Than I am sure I have in my whole five.
~ 1592 Wm. Shakespeare ~ Romeo & Juliet ~ ii. iv. 75


Ron
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2 posted 08-15-99 08:44 PM       View Profile for Ron   Email Ron   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ron's Home Page   View IP for Ron

Probably.

This actually is an example of what my poetry looks like before editing - 'cause I've never gone back to clean up the meter on this one, and it's definitely rough in a few spots. Maybe some day...
Christopher
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3 posted 08-16-99 03:20 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Wow Ron. This is my first chance to view ANY of your poetry, and I must admit to being very impressed.
I also want to add, as an avid sci-fi/fantasy reader, that this is a fresh new idea, concerning invasion from above (at least in my experience!)

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It's so cool, it's so swell, living here on Ice Planet hell!
-Psychotica-

Poet deVine
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4 posted 08-16-99 09:25 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Christopher, you should read the sci-fi novel Ron is writing (he let us read a sample a while back) - you would be more than impressed. The man can write!
WhtDove
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5 posted 10-16-1999 01:25 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

I missed this, and I'm glad we can go back now and see those we missed.
I really enjoyed this, and I have read some of your works and I love your poetry. Wish you would post some more. You are a great writer like PdV states!
Denise
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6 posted 10-16-1999 01:37 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is also the first of yours that I have had the chance to read. So you're not only a smart computer guy but also a very talented poet as well! Thanks for all your hard work around here and for sharing this poem!

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Denise
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7 posted 10-16-1999 02:40 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

What did Nan say? Awesome!

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

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8 posted 10-16-1999 03:03 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

The challenge was very hard...you had to use the phrase "tormented love, triumphant hate".. it was amazing at the different interpretations of those words....if you'd like to try it, be my guest!!!
Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 10-16-1999 03:30 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Ron,
A wonderful piece of writing.
freespiritfem
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10 posted 10-16-1999 04:15 PM       View Profile for freespiritfem   Email freespiritfem   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for freespiritfem

Ron...TERRIFIC....I really enjoyed reading this greatly!!! Very interesting...I love sci-fi..!!!

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Paula Diane S.
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11 posted 10-16-1999 11:07 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Sitting here in awe....masterfully done

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This is courage...to bear unflinchingly what heaven sends. ~Eurpides
poetFemmeFatale
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12 posted 10-16-1999 11:19 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Wowee!! Yeah, you certainly don't post often enough Ron! I thought I'd try out my little "problem" posting on your very own!! hehehe

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale

poetFemmeFatale
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13 posted 10-16-1999 11:20 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Uh...now I feel like an idiot....thanks Ron. LOL

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale

Ron
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14 posted 10-17-1999 09:57 AM       View Profile for Ron   Email Ron   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ron's Home Page   View IP for Ron

Okay, ya'll are going to force me to either write something new or dig into my vault. I appreciate all the kind comments, but this is not a poem I've ever been real happy with (that was one tough challenge phrase for me!).

Mmmm, maybe I could write at least some of the new software in meter and rhyme? That would kill two birds with one stone, with the added benefit of discovering whether Ceres has a sense of humor!
Pepper
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15 posted 10-17-1999 10:11 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Absolutely Wonderful Ron! I am another sci fi enthusiast.
Thank you for sharing this piece with us.

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
JennyLee
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16 posted 10-17-1999 11:59 AM       View Profile for JennyLee   Email JennyLee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JennyLee

Ron,
I enjoyed every single word! Delightful


Jenny Lee
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17 posted 06-12-2007 05:57 PM       View Profile for Drauntz   Email Drauntz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Drauntz

a poem of kind of life, well said. and sad.

beautiful poem again.
 
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