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When asked, the rhythm?

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U K Hero
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0 posted 08-29-99 08:19 PM       View Profile for U K Hero   Email U K Hero   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for U K Hero

When Asked, The Rhythm?

When asked
By a friend on the Internet
How, Iíd become so popular world wide,
I replied;

I have the ability and aptitude
To converse with those who have an inclination
To articulation,
And still retain,
The ability to explain,
Without making them appear less inferior.

To this my friend perplexed,
I explained what came next
By elucidating how I inscribe my fables bold,
And so, a story I Unfold.

In simple phrase
Not heterogeneous.

A man
Eager to impress the love in his life
Took to writing a poem, in hope,
He wrote:


I THINK OF YOU

I think of you
I always will,
Wont you come to bed with me
For my heart and loins you thrill, tonight.

Obviously poor
But written in a way as to open a door
For moments later wondrous glee,
A talented reply her repartee:


SIMPLE WORDS

Simple words are not enough?
Gifted expressions panache and rhythm
Before I relinquish to you my bosom
But get it right Iím yours tonight
And what you lack Iíll teach in person.


Not of finesse how to entrap
Rogetís Thesaurus cunning and brash,
Deep in thought of devilish aptitude
He penned an expression
Of divine fortitude.


DO ANGELS DREAM

Do angels dream in heavens cradle
Tranquil slumber dreamís of you,
For manís lust and passions praying
Trade their wings and haloís too.

Do angels dream of mortal danger
Will they stand and fight for you,
Would they love you after pleasure
Devote their lives to live as two.

Iíll swim a hundred oceans stormy
To cross a million deserts bare,
To tell you that I love you deeply
To show you that I care.

Hear the voice of angels calling
See them dance in candle light,
I canít compare my love to angels
But Iíll fight a mortal right
For your love a thousand battles
Iíll fight them all for love tonight, and tomorrow.

The question
The rhythm?
Many ponder on the moral adaptation
Such mixture of poems and cadence poor,
But mock not, she bowed to my skill
For behind closed door
The Rhythm, she teaches me still.

( I need help on this one )

U K Hero


[This message has been edited by U K Hero (edited 08-29-99).]
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RainbowGirl
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1 posted 08-29-99 08:33 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

I'd swim naked across oceans for a love like that...

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


Balladeer
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2 posted 08-29-99 09:22 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

I don't know where you need help. This is a wonderful piece of writing in my humblest of opinions.
Poet deVine
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3 posted 08-29-99 09:28 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

This is wonderful. I've read your work here and have some questions if you don't mind.

Why the user name of U K Hero?

In this poem there a reference to your work (if we take this poem as a reflection of your life) as being widely read. Do you have a web site?

Thank you for your time.
Nan
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4 posted 08-29-99 09:37 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Do continue to grace our forums with more of your heroic words, UK...
Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 08-29-99 10:42 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

U K,
your OK with me.
Nice job.
U K Hero
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6 posted 08-30-99 05:29 AM       View Profile for U K Hero   Email U K Hero   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for U K Hero

To all; thanks for your comments,
This is my second (Northern Queen, posted 29th Aug, the first)
Iím new here, as you can no doubt surmise.
Iím not happy with the punctuation of the poem (my weakest area) advice here would be helpful.

To: Poet deVine, U K Hero? Itís a long story (Iím English you know)
And no I donít have a web site perhaps one day.

TheCandyMan_1
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7 posted 08-30-99 06:20 AM       View Profile for TheCandyMan_1   Email TheCandyMan_1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TheCandyMan_1's Home Page   View IP for TheCandyMan_1

I've read many a famous poets works.. and still do not know if puncuation makes all that much difference. Your poem was wonderful and my opinion..thou not much...is that you should leave it be. It is wonderful.

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JA.Malone
 
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