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Augchic711
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0 posted 06-28-99 02:04 AM       View Profile for Augchic711   Email Augchic711   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Augchic711

The gentle kiss as we say good-bye
Could stay etched in my mind forever
You say it's not me that caused our problems
Just merely changing times
I question your initial motives for
our relationship beginning
Question if your feelings were ever true
But fact is as much as I can question
our relationsip the pain will never end.
Can you honestly ever tell me that
it wasn't something that I did that
caused our glorius bliss to end!

The gentle kiss as we say good-bye
Was merely just a dream!
Our relationship wasn't ever
glorious nor blissful
frankly it wasn't the wonderful
illusion I built up in my mind.
It wasn't a blissful romance.
It was just a mere
ILLUSION!


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DreamEvil
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1 posted 06-28-99 06:09 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Sometimes illusion soothes the soul. Wonderful piece.

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Patience is a virtue, but virtue has never been one of my redeeming qualities.

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2 posted 06-28-99 10:15 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Nothing could be truer to life than this poem. We always look at things the way we would like them to be and not necessarily the way they are. Reality is for people who can't face fantasy! You said it very well. Thanks for sharing.
Moonlight
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3 posted 06-28-99 10:57 AM       View Profile for Moonlight   Email Moonlight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonlight's Home Page   View IP for Moonlight

I identify with the speaker in this poem.
Very nice!

~m~

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jfreak
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4 posted 06-28-99 02:38 PM       View Profile for jfreak   Email jfreak   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jfreak

The truth of the matter is that Love is blind. When in love we make a concious or maybe a subconcious decision to overlook all the bad qualities in a person. The one thing that we most fail to do is when the time finally comes that the bad overshadows the good, do we still love that person no matter what or pack our bags and leave? (that is my little insight for the day)

Good poem. Content is good, structure seems a little bit shaky to me. Yet it is still a good poem. Keep up the great work.

JFreak
Augchic711
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5 posted 06-28-99 04:21 PM       View Profile for Augchic711   Email Augchic711   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Augchic711

Thank you to all of the other poets that replied to this piece. I wrote it about a week ago about the current break up. I had 5 minutes before I could clock in and I was a bit upset, I'm glad that I am not the only one who feels this way about love. Thank you all for your comments. Good luck to you all in your next work!

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