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Life Without Love

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Lucie
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0 posted 09-13-99 02:58 AM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lucie

Life without love

Once there was a lady who lived just down my street
she was cold and very bitter to everyone she’d meet.
I used to wonder about her and what made her this way
until I mentioned her name to my grandmother one day.

Miss lily is a lost soul my grandma said to me
let me tell you about her story and perhaps then you will see.
Why she doesn’t speak to people and spends her time alone
why she never has a visitor to the house she calls a home.

When Miss Lily was years younger she was quite a pretty girl
with eyes of cornflower blue and a head of auburn curls.
When she would go out on the town the boys would stop and stare,
but there was only one man about whom Miss Lily cared.

He was the son of the local owner of tavern in our town
and though his mother was very sweet it was said she got around.
The townsfolk talked about her and the men she entertained
she had gotten herself in trouble and the rumors still remained.

Now miss lily’s father was a judge and quite an important man
and having his daughter marry wealthy was his only plan.
When he learned about her love affair with the boy across the tracks
he shipped her off to boarding school and wouldn’t bring her back.

For a year Miss Lily was away and the rumors flew around
had she spent too much time alone with the boy from cross the town?
Had her father sent her off to hide the fact she was with child?
When I asked grandma were the rumors true, she looked at me and smiled.

No Lucie the stories were a lie Miss Lily was my best friend
letters for him she sent to me and his to her I’d send.
Miss Lily was in love with him and he in love with her
and no one could have guessed the end or how it would occur.

When Lily came back from school that fall and met up with her beau
her father, he had followed them and Miss Lily didn’t know.
When he confronted them together soon pushes came to shove
her father shot him on the spot and killed Miss Lily’s love.

She never did recover her love just died with him
she closed herself up in that house and never loved again.
Her father went to prison for the deed that he had done
he wrote a letter telling her.. her lover was his son.
© Copyright 1999 Lucille Dobbins - All Rights Reserved
~one voice~
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1 posted 09-13-99 03:38 AM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Lucie, this is an excellent story! You tell it so very well! The end is a little disturbing, but I still love how you constructed this piece! One more to add to my favorites!

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~onevoice~

"Odi et amo. Quare id faciam, fortasse requiris. Nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior."

Billy
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2 posted 09-13-99 03:41 AM       View Profile for Billy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Billy

What a great poem. I loved the surprise ending.
DreamEvil
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3 posted 09-13-99 03:45 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

I'm glad that your writer's block is gone, my dear. This verse is just one reason why.

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Pain is life, life is short, I will endure.
DreamEvil©


Justbleu
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4 posted 09-13-99 04:32 AM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Very good piece!! Was sad, but good!!

Justbleu

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"Never let anyone keep you from your dreams, follow your heart, be true to yourself, and if that special someone does to, go ahead, walk together side by side as one!!


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U K Hero
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5 posted 09-13-99 05:16 AM       View Profile for U K Hero   Email U K Hero   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for U K Hero

You certainly deserve a comment here it brought a tear to my eye, well done…
Balladeer
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6 posted 09-13-99 05:42 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Oh, brother! Excellent yarn-spinning, Lucie.
hoot_owl_rn
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7 posted 09-13-99 08:29 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

What an interesting read!

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"The role of the writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say." ~Anais Nin
Lucie
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8 posted 09-13-99 09:40 AM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

I'm glad you all liked it.. geesh my mind is twisted..hahhahahahah
DBeth
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9 posted 09-13-99 12:31 PM       View Profile for DBeth   Email DBeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DBeth

Excellent poem,and very nicely written.

DBeth

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roxane
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10 posted 09-13-99 02:20 PM       View Profile for roxane   Email roxane   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for roxane

WOW the ending is such a suprise. my eyes actually got wide. there are so many things to this poem. at first i think miss lily is unfortunate for having lost her love, then i see that she is just abashed by that fact that she was in love with her half brother. at first i see her father as a cruel, unloving man, then as a protector of some sort. this was soooooo great
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