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Corey Collier
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 17


0 posted 2000-01-13 04:27 AM


                  Thoughts Of You

As I lay here in this hospital bed.  All I can seem to do is think about you.  I can only picture you in my mind because I can't see you or hold you in my arms.  I don't know why I did what I did.  Maybe because I LOVE YOU so damn much!  Everything hit me all at once and I just felt like I was dead when you walked out of my life.  I don't know what to do now.  I love you so much.  No one seems to know how I feel anymore or never did.  And yes I will always love you.  I am just lost without you.  I have knowhere to go.  My mind is lost.  I just can't get you out of my mind.  How much I want to hold you and take all my pain away.  I know we weren't going to be together forever but why did it have to end now?  I need to be with you more then anything i've ever wanted.  And killing myself is a way of showing you I would be true to you in mind, body, heart and soul.  I love you....

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JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
1 posted 2000-01-13 04:40 AM


Hi Corey,  It seems like you have plenty of love to give you just need to find the right one to give it to.  She will accept you as you are and she will value who you are.    Take care,  James
Dusk Treader
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187
St. Paul, MN
2 posted 2000-01-16 04:03 PM


Welcome to Passions!

If this girl walked out on you, she probably had good reason, and trying to bring her back by showing how much you love her by sacrificing yourself does not seem a proper solution to me.  Good piece though, you can definetly see the emotion coming through.

Btw:  I mean no disrespect in saying this, so please don't take my words wrong, but posting multiple posts, like your 5 works, is not appreciated here.  It impacts you because you won't get as many replies.  So try to spread your posts out in the future, Thanks  


 In flames I shall not be consumed, but reborn. -- Abrahm Simons



Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration
3 posted 2000-01-19 04:22 AM


Wow Corey!
Powerful entrance here!
I must say that I disagree with the last though...suicide is a selfish act, and in no way can prove love, rather it shows your inability to content yourself with the other's happiness!
Chin up, I have been in your shoes! I know!

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