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roxane Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 505us |
How did I sleep last night? I scarcely know I did. Only my fingers, slumber swollen Blur in the dreary grey light Of a resisting winter sun. He has grown pale at the thought of spring. These thoughts remind me of the missed hours All the empty silent hours of night That could be spent in tears Somehow I let them drift by And my weak pillow thanks me To remain dry for one night How did sleep come last night? For he only comes in silence I heard not his steps coming Over all the buzzing of midnight: The whir of my mind, unrest; The tick of my heart, distraught; And his name like a siren Goes off and bloodies my ears. In my dreamless sleep I heard it wailing still Of my loveless misadventures Of my heart; lead and open The siren screams his name eternal How did sleep find me last night I had believed he forgot his way I thought he'd come not again But yet he took me away I rested last night, but how? Did I toss and turn and sigh? Or did I yield to it as before, Before my thoughts could punish me With such ease and grace and levity. I suppose I forgot my face. My unagile movements ceased. All at once I seemed to die. How could I sleep again tonight? My weary head already strains Though twilight has yet to stain The still, bright cloudless sky. Sleep is so like a friendship, you see, One ill word can break it And not a thousand apologies reconcile The simple delicate balance shattered. In one last thought I allay my fears: If sleep should come, he finds me willing If not, I will always wait With open arms to embrace. this got a whopping one reply in teen, i thought that it could do better here "Come night, come darkness, for you cannot come too soon or stay too long in such a place as this." Charles Dickens roxane |
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dispatch debbie Junior Member
since 1999-12-29
Posts 16Michigan |
roxane, Beautiful...simply beautiful. Leading us thru possibilities & impossibilities of finding that elusive repose!!! Wonderful free verse, roxane. Hope to read more. Too much depth for the teens? Don't let it discourage you...keep writing!! Debbie Treat others the way you wish to be treated. |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Just want to say this is beautiful, I wouldn't know how to improve upon it. Keep on writing, you certainly capture emotions very well in your poetry. |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
Roxane (Happy New Year  )and ..... welcome to Passions .. LOL heh heh I'm really glad you posted this, just for one moment I thought you were serious. This poem deserves a good read .. I'll be back tonight .. Philip |
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