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miscellanea
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0 posted 2017-05-17 11:56 PM

               Groomed by Knife

I am to be cut by day, groomed by knife,
      my pain to be vased away
Or, possibly held in admiration,
      if luck is in display;
The shadow of my petal
      holds tight before first bloom
While vetted by the masters a rose within the room.


           My fragrance, will they like
           Or pen of me in dress?
           Will my thorns be obnoxious?
           Or, by sharpness to them impress?

I am to be painted upon a canvas
      for everyone to view,
The shadow of the artist the rose's wants drew;
I am poetic prose to be interpreted how you please,
You are the critic, and words, Expression's sea.


                   ~misc~

[This message has been edited by miscellanea (05-18-2017 11:24 AM).]

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

1 posted 2017-05-18 11:03 AM

Loved, especially, the feel of this, my friend.
Loved, also, seeing your name gracing these pages again . . . (as little as I am in these pages to "see" anything)

Loved it all.

j.

miscellanea
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2 posted 2017-05-18 11:22 AM

Thanks, J.  There's a guy who's giving a free writing class at the local library and this week's goal is to write a piece in first person. I was blank and thought I might try a poem instead of a story--the motive--much shorter piece!

It's good to hear from you again.  I hope all is well with you.

              misC

Poet In Pink
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Posts 1066
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3 posted 2017-05-18 02:00 PM

Pleased to meet you Misc ~ I would say you have surpassed your writing goal with this piece. I especially like your last two lines... Poetry is indeed just that ~ Thank you for sharing, much enjoyed.

miscellanea
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4 posted 2017-05-18 11:23 PM

Poet-in-Pink,
It's nice to meet you, too. Thanks for taking the time to stop by. Welcome to Piptalk!
~misc

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

5 posted 2017-05-20 01:00 PM

This is really brilliant and creative. What a fantastic piece of poetry, miscellanea. Like a breath of fresh air.

[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (05-20-2017 03:04 PM).]

soul drifter
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since 2004-09-08

Posts 711
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6 posted 2017-05-20 02:48 PM

I loved, loved, loved every word of this, but this part,
fantastic:

           My fragrance, will they like
           Or pen of me in dress?
           Will my thorns be obnoxious?
           Or, by sharpness to them impress?

And I loved that ending! Exceptional writing, just... wow.
Great job.

"Whatever makes you weird is probably your greatest asset"-Joss Whedon

P.U Stinkenbaum
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No Fan Of Exhaust Fans

7 posted 2017-05-20 04:57 PM

We should all be a rose...just once. You've given me a real feel for it misc.

Just out looking for the real me...

miscellanea
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8 posted 2017-05-23 01:46 AM

Bluesy,
    I am glad you liked it. Thanks for taking the time to read.
            `misc

soul drifter,
    Glad you drifted over to this way. Thanks for your kind response.
             `misc

P.U.,
     I still can't get over your name! Nothing of the sort, from what I've read.
I appreciate you stopping by.
              misc

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
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9 posted 2017-05-23 01:36 PM

Hi Miscellanea....so good to see you! Having been a florist I have groomed by knife many a rose, but not as well as you described in this poem.

P.U Stinkenbaum
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Posts 388
No Fan Of Exhaust Fans

10 posted 2017-05-23 05:50 PM

quote:
"P.U.,
I still can't get over your name"!

Yes, it's an odd moniker alright, but so was my moniking mother. She told me after I came home from school looking like a raccoon all the time, that it was the only name that fit during my first two years of life. Go figure, eh?

But hey! It probably was no easier for you miscellanea. You may not have come home looking like a raccoon as I did, but having no one relate to you about anything specific was probably no fun either! We all have our cross to bear I guess.

Enjoyed your poem and your company. Us oddballs gotta stick together!

Just out looking for the real me...

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

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Between the Lines

11 posted 2017-05-25 03:09 PM

Lovely write...lifting me up on a rainy day.

Alison

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since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

12 posted 2017-05-27 03:58 PM

I see I only thought that I'd written a response to your poem, MisC. I am happy I returned for an encore reading. I love this poem - title, structure, content all have captivated me.

Alison

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