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Rex Allen McCoy
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since 2000-01-30

Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London

0 posted 2014-02-09 11:01 PM

Winded . . .
jogging the shoreline past knee high surf
shirt sullied
front to back
like Jack Frost at recess in the noonday sun

Huffing an extra moment
while puffing at the lakeside air
Musing at your approach
gazing puppet-like
to your breath-robbing stride

Enticing
yet demure
you side-step surf
framed with endless sand and comber wave

Passing within a smile's length
Synchronizing your intended dance
with a smiling glance
Only. . .
you're met with silence
while the sounds of surf
gently fade
below the pulse in my throbbing chest

My one line arsenal
timorous
left home by the mirror

My response ?

A sheepish urge to flip driftwood
with an idle foot

Another potential Valentine
swept away
like the water erasing your steps

The drifting wood
strikes my unguarded ankle
~

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

1 posted 2014-02-09 11:21 PM

Beautiful with so many memorable lines, not the least of which is:

quote:
"Another potential Valentine
swept away like the water erasing your steps

Thoroughly enjoyed!

Regards from Bluesy

...just bein' Bluesy

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

2 posted 2014-02-10 01:03 AM

it is like a beautiful "apparition", the images are very poetical and convinving, great write i appreciated a lot

-thanks

yann

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

3 posted 2014-02-10 06:00 AM

Rex-
This is wonderful! Great turns of phrase right down to your "unguarded ankle"!

Lori

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2014-02-10 08:07 AM

Really liked the wordplay of this poem, Rex.

~*~ Life is simpler when you plow around the stump. ~*~

Kit McCallum

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since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

5 posted 2014-02-10 10:11 AM

I love the descriptiveness throughout. Wonderful visuals Rex, very much enjoyed this.

Best wishes,
/Kit

Rex Allen McCoy
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since 2000-01-30

Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London

6 posted 2014-02-10 09:46 PM

thanks everyone... if I were ever to be looking for a valentine, I really believe that this is what would happen. I really am this shy and quite soft spoken, until I know the person.

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

7 posted 2014-02-11 09:44 AM

Wow... I can surely relate to this one... that one memory where I never spoke a word and have been left to wonder "what if" for the remainder of my days. Enjoyed the read.

Michael

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