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Open Poetry #46

Summer Solstice (Haiku)

secondhanddreampoet
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0 posted 2010-06-22 06:13 PM

  Summer Solstice Haiku

   morning mist retreats
   sunlight on a butterfly
   gentle Spring passing

            --- b. e. adams [6/21/2010]

[This message has been edited by secondhanddreampoet (06-22-2010 06:50 PM).]

Earl Brinkman
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1 posted 2010-06-22 08:36 PM

This is my idea of what a haiku should be.

easy1
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2 posted 2010-06-23 12:03 PM

This is imho an excellent haiku. I see the mist, the brightness, the butterfly at rest and in flight, and feel the warmth and gentleness of the early dawm-to-midmorning of a calm summer solstice day. Very good!

As to style and construction, it is in what I have seen most over the past several years of reading English-language haiku at least. It is a fine style, the three non-punctuated clauses.

nakdthoughts
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3 posted 2010-06-23 06:24 AM

Spring has passed for sure, Bruce...hope you have some breezes your way.

Professor Gloom
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4 posted 2010-06-23 07:07 AM

Well done,

Gloom

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5 posted 2010-06-23 03:16 PM

A master of the haiku too. Bravo, Bruce.

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