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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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Gone Your memory wears no cologne yet sniffs the air that is filled with the smell of empty rooms the presence of your promises. I still feel you move inside me when shadows sip beneath the breath and I know I'm too young to feel this damn old. You cling to the glaciers of my soul disappearing in the snow that drifts across the white mask of my weeping breasts. I am pinned by my longing the memory of rain ~ the cricket’s coo on the morning time was a thief. You linger dreams of shattered warmth clothing me in the happiness of this primal raw ache how I loved loving you how I wanted to be the mother of your child. Goodbye is not even close to the right word if there even is a word. I've searched for you but you're gone you've been gone too long; and I scathe tears within tears ~ the sound of pain f a l l i n g rotting quietly in my palms. Some days I half expect to find you yet there is nothing but the stillness of stone the silence of want and the breaking of my heart. My greatest friend you are gone. ~ By Melissa Long-Monette Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Dadygoose Member
since 2010-01-01
Posts 162A Communist country |
This poem echos silently with a dull ache and the longing for former times, it must have taken a lot of emotional energy to write it, the wrenchining longing for what might have been, but is now gone. It represents a healthy stage of healing old wounds that are still too raw to write about I’m sure, but thank you for sharing this peak of your inner life. As for Canada, I’ve been upset that I can no longer get 680 news on the Internet and I don’t know why and I am clumsy with computers (chuckles) I can’t believe this doesn’t have any replies but I’m glad to have been the first one!! Jaime Hey, nobody's human! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Melissa Excellent word pictures with beautiful illustrative flow. I found the pain in this writing very soothing. I do play blues music and it's always been said, "the blues will heal ya." I really enjoyed the melancholy beauty in this piece. Eric |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Ethome and Dadygoose~ Thank you so much for your replies  I've written a plethora of poems about my ex for catharsis.....It certainly does help with the healing process. I've known my ex since I was 19 years old and we just broke up at age 30,we were planning on finally getting married and then it ended. So now at age 30 I have to start over, but I trust in Jesus and will find the man I'm meant to be with |
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Billie Cullimore Member
since 2009-03-27
Posts 315 |
Time will heal a broken heart. Have faith it is always darkest just before the dawn. Billie Cullimore |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Thank you Billie And yes I agree that time does heal all wounds, it isn't just cliche.....and I trust in God enough to know that there's a lesson to be learned and I agree with you that it's the darkest before the dawn Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I'm too young to feel this damn old. ~*~ No, baby.... You won't find the man... He will mine you! Take a breath from Kiss mentor, Gene Simmons, that the best man will stray... but if the rope is loose, he'll stay closer.  Let's talk, sooner.  |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
That is a beautiful poignant poem dear Melissa, a delight to read. Thanks for sharing, Take care and have a lovely day. Lindsay |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Melissa, the right one is out there I am 40 and it took him 16 years to find me again but he did |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I was sucked up into your poem. It's an amazing piece of writing. You expressed all that is gone with such beautiful imagry. Damn. This is incredible. Alison |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Melissa, I only have simple words for you. I am in love with your sense of writing, it speaks to me like whispered breaths on a misty mirror. Bless you poetess. This one will be impossible to forget. Richard |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
Truly inspired writing, and that is probably what makes it word perfect. Jeff |
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