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threadbear
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0 posted 2010-03-12 01:24 AM



" $1.87 "

His hands barely fit around the 50cent piece
and that is what started it all off:
Mother's birthday and that was all he had.
He MUST have $1.87 to buy the cologne at the dollar store
the one with her favorite animal on the bottle
a lamb.
He knows she must love it:
she always wore it when he was around.

There must be a way for young sons to accumulate great wealth.
So the treasure hunt began
beneath the seat cushions in the sofa:
32 cents
and under the drive thru window at Burger Biggie:
11 cents
in Dad's old suit pocket that he had outgrown in the waist:
57 cents
and a forgotten dime in his painted cigar box
a rolled away quarter shining half buried in the gutter
and two pennies tar-trapped in the road.


Wrapped in a hankerchief, all the world's gold
and it was just enough
$1.87
to buy a simple bottle of cologne
with a lamb on it

by Jeff Feezle
(inspired by The Gift of the Magi)


© Copyright 2010 Jeff Feezle - All Rights Reserved
Klassy Lassy
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1 posted 2010-03-12 05:14 AM


I adore this poem.  Years ago, my son made me a crayon butterfly on a piece of brown paper sack when he was in the second grade.  I still have it some 30 years later.  I remember how he thought it wasn't good enough or pretty enough, and my heart still melts every time I see it.

My eyes welled reading this.  What a treasure.... How soon little boys fly.  

Martie
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2 posted 2010-03-12 11:46 AM


Jeff....gifts from the heart are priceless, as is this poem.  
Balladeer
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3 posted 2010-03-12 12:32 PM


Where there's a will...
viking_metal
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4 posted 2010-03-12 01:05 PM


This is awesome.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

latearrival
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5 posted 2010-03-12 02:44 PM


I enjoyed this,Latearrival
Sunshine
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6 posted 2010-03-12 03:30 PM


Ah, the tender need of wanting something
so much, just to willingly give it away.

I enjoyed this, m'friend!


Billie Cullimore
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7 posted 2010-03-15 01:13 AM


  As the mother of four little boys I understood this darling write. They are all grown up now but I still have the wonderful gifts I recieved when they were just little boys, (they made themselves)

Billie C.

LindsayP
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8 posted 2010-03-17 11:25 PM



You told a very heart warming story with

that one Jeff, a delight to read.

Lindsay

threadbear
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9 posted 2010-03-18 01:15 AM


Klassy Lassy hellos - there was a dresser in my Grandmother's house that kept everything that her grandchildren ever sent her.  She would entertain us sometimes by reading some of the letters when we were young and goofy, and would tell us how much and why each letter meant to much to her.  We couldn't remember our own actions back then, but she never forgot a one.
Jeff

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10 posted 2010-03-18 01:19 AM


Hi, dear Martie:  I'm a person that enjoys the act of giving, except to receive.  When I see others participate in life this way, it does soften my heart, too.

Hey, Mike: Thanks for the look-see, and your comment means you know the Gift of the Magi story.  O'Henry is one of my favorite short story writers.

Viking Guy: much obliged for your time and kind words.

threadbear
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11 posted 2010-03-18 01:23 AM


Hi, LateArrival, and am happy you are pleased.  Cool!

Hi, K Sunshine: and your quote: "Ah, the tender need of wanting something
so much, just to willingly give it away
." is a perfect way of putting it! 'Zactly!

Hi Sweet Billie:  That was precisely the feeling I was hoping to emote: when parents are given a gift from their young ones that lasts, not in condition, but in duration.

Hey Mate Lindsay!  hope it struck a familiar chord with you as well.  I've had plenty of experience being a broke bloke!

Thanks y'all!
Jeff

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