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Open Poetry #46

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Tim
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since 1999-06-08

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0 posted 2010-03-09 10:53 PM

He is like perhaps the tree,
...that grows beyond the wall,
A cottonwood now past its prime,
...no longer straight and tall,
Standing there against the wind,
...that scours the Kansas plain,
Subject to the ravages,
...of snow and sleet and rain,
With trunk now leaning, branches bare,
....not near as broad and high,
Yet still the dying cottonwood,
...reaches to the sky.

Balladeer

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1 posted 2010-03-09 11:10 PM

A great message in this one, Tim...nicely told.

Earl Brinkman
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since 2010-03-03

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Osaka, Japan

2 posted 2010-03-09 11:33 PM

This would be a good poem for beginners of poetry to read because I think that it shows what careful and effective word choice can accomplish.

threadbear
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Indy

3 posted 2010-03-10 01:05 AM

Succint and rhythmic
perfect for poetry
and painted with such nice even strokes.
Jeff

Sunshine

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4 posted 2010-03-10 09:30 AM

Tim,

We had that very cottonwood in our south
pasture just north of town. Even dead, its
beauty still attracted the savage ravaging
of white lightening, and succumbed a few
years ago.

It's skeletal beauty makes for a good
pondering seat, however.

Maybe that is where my muse is hiding?

And no, the academic world didn't bite on
my pole, either.

Retirement comes early.

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

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So. El Monte, California

5 posted 2010-03-15 03:57 PM

This poem is complex in it's simplicity which always makes for a great poem.
Ida

Denise

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6 posted 2010-03-15 04:38 PM

Very nicely done Tim!

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