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Ceiling Dance Floor
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Ceiling Dance Floor |
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kindredspirit Member
since 2009-05-19
Posts 156 |
Euphoria drew you close and barred the door He held your hand to ease the first ensnare You're waltzing empty skies and craving more Addiction reels you in to need his war So smoke drifts up towards God in place of prayer Euphoria drew you close and barred the door Dark circles past your eyes define his core The closest friends you've left still know they care You're waltzing empty skies and craving more A paper chain of faces to adore Go tripping through the moment like a dare Euphoria drew you close and barred the door Palms groping towards the ceiling meet the floor He built high walls and left you hollow there You're waltzing empty skies and craving more Inertia left us cracked on separate shores Divided lives with only words to share Euphoria drew you close and barred the door You're waltzing empty skies and craving more. [This message has been edited by kindredspirit (01-12-2010 12:37 PM).] |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Oh! This is great, and I will come back to read it more than once. It's a villanelle, isn't it? The form is captivating with the repetitions that still weave so well with each new line. The expression of reaching past the void and finding footwork and grasp here is very effective. Dancing is a lot like poetry... Beautiful write! Loved this! ~Karen |
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kindredspirit Member
since 2009-05-19
Posts 156 |
Thank you kindly miss  Indeed, it's a villanelle, done in ionic pentameter. |
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