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JUMP AUNT JUMP!
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JUMP AUNT JUMP! |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
JUMP AUNT JUMP! Chance to see the south JUMP AUNT JUMP! Jump and was sold. 3/5th of a person JUMP AUNT JUMP! Jump and was sold. Smell of the south rising JUMP AUNT JUMP! Jump and was sold. Bought by different men JUMP AUNT JUMP! Jump and was sold. Tear them apart JUMP AUNT JUMP! Jump and was sold. I'm not what smells JUMP AUNT JUMP! Jump and was sold. I felt so raw and ill JUMP AUNT JUMP! Jump and was sold. Everything would change JUMP AUNT JUMP! Jump and was sold. Worn out and died JUMP AUNT JUMP! Jump and was sold. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms ebony Can see you tapping this down doing a glare or two as you place your mind between the lines. |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Intense, yes, Dark Ms.ebony |
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Shortysdadd Junior Member
since 2011-06-26
Posts 39 |
Delicious! I don't even have to make a decision How to feel. The poem does it for me. Cheated and Raw. Love the rhythm. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is such an intense and personal piece... and needs to be published. |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Very good, EG I like the cadence, it fits the theme well. enjoyed, even though I don't like the truth in it. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Impressive and angry. The only way it could have been written. ~ Money can't buy happiness, but broke can't buy anything. ~ |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Intense, Edna. Ida |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Thank you to everyone for the comments. Shortysdadd, Yes the poem is ment to be read aloud. Sunshine, Thank you for the encouraging word. Ice, Thanks for your understanding. JerryPat2, lots of emotion, you're right. Ida, I'll explain over coffee. |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Damn (meaning this is good and I am speechless). |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Thank you Alison for taking the time to read and especially your comments. ebonygirl |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
I agree with Alison... Nice write. JL  |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Thank you JL for reading my poem. ebonygirl |
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