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Namyh
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0 posted 2011-06-24 06:43 PM



...In the Basement !

I've seen Fear on the face of men in war,
that wide-eyed riveted gaze.
On mine in front of a foe with a gun
who intended to extinquish my days.
But nothing would ever prepare me
for this tale I'm compulsed to present
'bout hauling wet clothes to a dryer
downstairs in my buddy's basement.

First the lights went out. I dropped the load.
The basement silence held two sounds
like knives slicing air in the distance
and thudding feet walking soft ground.
I lunged for the stairway in darkness
but the Thing scraped my ribcage so !
At the top of the stairs, I could just see the door,
only seven steps to go.
Its breath singed the hairs on the back of my neck.
I jumped two steps, leaving five.
I bounded two more and that left me three
with the Monster on my heels and alive.
I lunged for the door, ope and closed it.
All in one motion I did !
It snarled and pounded and pounded.
My escape must have blown its lid.

Each pounding lifted me off the door.
Cracked wood pieces propelled to the floor.
Ejected like bullets were door hinge screws.
Wood began crumbling.
It was coming through !
I shivered and sweated in silent fright.
Awaiting the crash ! Awaiting the fight !
Then suddenly ! All went silent !
And again my ears heard the sound.
Knifeclaws, slicing air in the distance,
started fading and melting, going down.

The breath returned to my body
and the sweat began to dry.
Why it stopped? I'll never know.
I'm lucky and I won't ask why !

When I told my vacationing buddy,
he chuckled and said I was crazed.
But I saw him back home from vacation today
with his "wide-eyed riveted gaze."
So, don't laugh at anyone saying,
"There's a Monster in your basement, my friend."
You can bet your sweet life, I would never forget it
or ever chuckle again !

Namyh


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1 posted 2011-06-24 06:46 PM


I KNEW that bad things happen in basements!  And parking garages!  You know too.  Oh man.  I am so glad that I don't have a basement.  I'd never, ever, never, ever go in it.  Never!

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Namyh
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2 posted 2011-06-24 07:29 PM


Alison – After such an experience, the doctors say I should be back on solid foods in 2 weeks…..3 at the most. LOL. Now I follow the Boogie Man manual ( page 3, paragraph 4, line 7) which clearly says go armed with a short bazooka, 2 grenades, 3 land mines, 1 military survival knife and a cold Sprite, shaken not stirred ‘cause the fizz kills monsters dead within 2 feet. You are now a course graduate of Monster-Combat 101 and you’re ready Alison. Go get ‘em and have no fear. LOL. Namyh
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3 posted 2011-06-25 12:44 PM


mutters ... no fear, my ass ....

[smiles ever so brightly]

Okay, Namyh, I am right behind you.  I got your back.  Yep, I so do.  

The door's that way ----------> right?


ponderthepoetorrsx
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4 posted 2011-06-25 03:11 AM


like your descriptiveness
Namyh
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5 posted 2011-06-25 07:41 PM


Alison – “Fear not! We’ll walk shoulder to shoulder, armed and ready, marching into the bowels of the basement to face the ferocious terror lurking there. I’ll have your back and you’ll have my b…….. Hey Alison? Where’d you go? Come back! Ha! Ha! Ha! Ha! Thanks a lot. Namyh
P.S. – And stay out of those parking garages too!

Namyh
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6 posted 2011-06-25 07:42 PM


ponderthepoetorrsx - Descriptiveness is a paint brush of the poet, one of the tools used to create a poetic canvass which tugs the heart or lifts a spirit or maybe even saves a soul. Something for any poet to ponder when creating. I’m very happy you stopped in and so glad you enjoyed this. I hope it comes in handy. Namyh  
JerryPat2
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7 posted 2011-06-27 10:33 PM


Sound like a chapter in a very strange and violent novel. You really turned on the power of descriptive passages.

~ Man who wants pretty nurse, must be patient. ~

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