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Open Poetry #47

Memorial Day Ceremony

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

0 posted 2011-05-30 01:13 PM

The old men stand proud
before the scattered crowd.
The battered warriors
of half-forgotten wars.
With trembling hands
they salute the flag.
and recall their youth
lost on foreign shores,

A marching band plays
and speeches are made
on this solemn day of remembrance.
Some reflect on the victories
but most remember the loses
and grieve for those who lie
beneath the miles of white crosses.

Ida Werrett

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2011-05-30 02:09 PM

Yes, it is a sad day for all.

~ Diplomacy is the art of saying 'Nice doggie' until you can find a rock ~

Brian James
Member

since 2005-06-26

Posts 147
Winnipeg

2 posted 2011-05-30 03:34 PM

Pardon the formalistic remark, but I really love clever rhymes that build word associations. "Losses" with "Crosses," "Wars" with "Shores," that's really strong. You see shores and wonder if people have ever died there, see crosses and know what they often represent.

Lovely poem, not much else to say. You really are a talented poet.

Brian

"To me, the thing that art does for life is to clean it, to strip it to form."
~Robert Frost

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2011-05-31 09:22 AM

quote:
but most remember the losses
and grieve for those who lie
beneath the miles of white crosses.

Just so, dear Ida. Powerful poetic message.

Love,
Margherita

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