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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2011-05-10 11:04 PM


* * *

Warning: Sentiment content exceeds standards as set by Hallmark's...hallmark.

* * *

It's so difficult, this night.
My job description seems to read:
"Present, but Invisible"

or?

Please-just-don't-embarrass-me.

That's karma from the restaurant rules--
all those "can'ts" and "yes, you shoulds"
that I had imposed on you

since

you'd learned to hold a spoon,

I watched you eat with wary eyes.

For that I must apologize

Or maybe not

just realize

how much I love this chosen job.

It's difficult to "bon voyage"
as you sail away from me.
Happy Birthday lovely child--
I wish you all I know you dream.

Just not too far away from me--
you've been, you are, fine company.

and I do love you so.

* * *


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2011-05-10 11:18 PM


Oh my darling friend...

this is just the beginning
of all you'll ever enjoy
from the gift you've given the world.

Happy Birthday, Child.

You're a woman now...

gift your mother with treasures!




serenity blaze
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2 posted 2011-05-10 11:26 PM


ssshhhhhhhh...I'm in here trying not to cry.



sigh

and grin

and sigh...thanks Kari. *hugs*

serenity blaze
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3 posted 2011-05-10 11:33 PM


Oh? And?

"gift your mother with treasures!"

She brought me a gift today--a lovely star candle-thingie.

It makes sense.

Her first word was ... "moon".

Now I'm in here trying to make me look like I haven't been crying.

latearrival
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4 posted 2011-05-10 11:59 PM


What a wonderful age to be. She has the whole world to conquer. I do not know if I would want to do it all over again though. Love to you and her. jo
Marchmadness
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5 posted 2011-05-11 01:06 AM


Lovely thoughts. Lucky daughter to have a mpm like you.
                               Ida

OwlSA
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6 posted 2011-05-11 01:55 AM


I believe I understand every tear you are trying not to cry, Karen, but, for my part, the tears are flowing down my cheeks and my heart is constricting to create more, it seems.  I'm not even trying not to cry (as I don't have a twenty-year old daughter not to cry in front of!  Lol).  

Wish your daughter for me a very Happy Birthday and entrance into womanhood.   Please tell her that at her age, I felt the same way as she does, but that at your age and way past it to my age, I feel the way you do, and that she will do too when she is your age and will still do when she is my age.  Smiles.

And well done, on your daughter's behalf!  You kept the sentiment in tremendous check!!!  Smiles.

Owl

Margherita
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7 posted 2011-05-11 05:44 AM


Oh, this is beautiful and poignant!

Happy Birthday to your daughter!

Love,
Margherita

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8 posted 2011-05-11 07:29 AM


Your warning says it all. Hallmark should be so blessed..

May our children take our good parts, avoid our bad parts and be everything we would be if we had another chance.

No one says it like you.....I wish her a happy birthday and a lifetime of wonder.


EmmaRose
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9 posted 2011-05-11 07:41 AM


She will never be far with you, with one beat beneath her heart and she knows that Mama Bear loves her so.
Be blessed

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10 posted 2011-05-11 03:09 PM


Karen...Please tell her happy Birthday for me.
She may get older and hopefully wiser if she is anything like you. She may move a thousand miles away, but there will always be that bond between you that may stretch but never be broken..So what's next maybe a new name GRANDMA!!! LOL.Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

serenity blaze
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11 posted 2011-05-11 04:22 PM


Paullie! *smack*

We're just not ready for that.

But blech, I am now digesting a combination of beer, cheese dip, and some "beastie" ice cream cake. I feel like hell and the dog is sick too.

Oy.

All this livin' is killin' me.

Happy Birthday, Krista. Mom loves you. (There's sweet tea in the fridge, tuna, and I'll get some salad stuff tomorrow.)

Oh, there's also a beer can on the floor in the livingroom--I know that ain't MINE, so would y'mind gettin' to that since your special day is over?

And I really appreciate the replies--so many of you have watched my kids grow up with me.

That's really kinda neat.


JerryPat2
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12 posted 2011-05-11 10:33 PM


Damn, Karen, you about made the old guy start blubbering . . . Beautifully rendered . . .

~ I think we should only read books that wound and stab us.-Kafka ~

jwesley
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13 posted 2011-05-12 09:46 AM


Ah, my friend...a beautiful milestone in YOUR life too!  She's never doubted your love - no matter what she "may" have said at times (under stress!).  Wonderfully written and felt... and your love shows through and through.

My heart to you both, and Happy Birthday ...
to BOTH of you! (biased, of course, to her)

j.

serenity blaze
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14 posted 2011-05-12 04:09 PM


I hug your responses to my heart.

(and I got a hearthug from my daughter, too.)

*sniffles*

Love you all.

Sunshine
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15 posted 2011-05-12 07:33 PM


Well, darlin', she was nearly 10 when you started sharing! How could we not love her as one of our own? I remember when you introduced her to the blue pages...

But the question is, did she take "getting old" well?






AlCowie
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16 posted 2011-05-13 09:26 AM


(Sensible first verse)
Happy birthday to your daughter,
Happy twenty years to you.
Under the bridge, a lifetime's water,
But the bridge is the link between the two.

(Nonsense second verse)
And now she's a woman with all you've taught her,
Why not buy her a kangaroo?
It might be a mission, but once you've caught her
She can ride drinking sherry from a high heeled shoe!
(Clearly a Jimmy Choo. Bought in Lima, Peru)

xx

Dark Stranger
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17 posted 2011-05-13 11:30 AM


twenty one?  geeze now you two are twin sisters huh...cool stuff mommieK
faithmairee
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18 posted 2011-05-13 01:28 PM


awwww, this is really beautiful....loved every word of it...happy belated birthday to her

Love,


Faith

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

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