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Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

0 posted 2011-05-10 10:52 PM

_{You say words that float listlessly,
yet carry a weight to weigh my thoughts.
Simple words. Fragile hearts. It's all the same
in a continuum of repetitious actions and feelings

My pulse beats to keep things steady
even when everything feels out of place.
A relic cognition creeps upon my soul.
Caliginous dreams keeping me up at night.

I take a breath. Heave a sigh.
Could of sworn I'd be stronger by now..
Looks like scribbling is the only way
to rid myself from such a disposition.

Words; simple words..
Never knew you could bring me to a point
where aspiring has only gotten me so far.
To a point to learn from mistaking you the one..
..to hold my heart.

I can't help but feel the fool in this act.

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Long time; no post. I've been off this site for a long time now. I don't know how many of you still remember me, but now I'm back for a while. :) For those who don't know of my writing; I don't really follow a structure like professional poets. I use poetry to express myself in a way of choosing. So if there is grammatical error or other things of the sort, then please over look them. Read the poem for what it is and not what others mean it to be. Otherwise I'm glad and honor to have you reading my work. :)}

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

1 posted 2011-05-11 02:24 AM

I enjoyed your excellent, sensitive and introspective poem and hurt for your sadness and discomfort. I like the fact that your find writing cathartic. However, I don’t believe that your disposition is foolish. It is my humble opinion that it is wise. You have seen that your situation is not a positive one. Whilst it is extremely easy to say, and not so easy to do, in my humble opinion, you have 3 options – to accept the situation which means continued unhappiness – or to get out of it, which could be full of logistical and emotional difficulties and heartaches – or to improve it gradually, by whatever means that are not illegal, immoral or fattening (as my mother used to say). The third one could be the most difficult of all – fraught with setbacks and fear of its impossibility, and perhaps even a realisation that it is in fact impossible. However, (not that you are asking me!), it would be the route I would go, trying all means, before settling for the second option if all else fails.

Owl

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

2 posted 2011-07-26 12:14 PM

Owl, Thank you for reading my work and commenting. You are right in your opinion. I originally wrote this poem about a relationship so I'm glad that you spot the whole struggle in the relationship. I had a really hard time trying to say what I really wanted to portray. Thanks again for reading.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

3 posted 2011-07-26 03:19 PM

Zach: You're well remembered... welcome back! *S* I'm just sliding back in from a prolonged sabbatical myself... life happens... but scribble always calls. *S*

I enjoyed this introspective write. And if such disposition is foolish? *S* You've plenty of company. *S*

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