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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2011-05-05 09:19 AM



you were lovely on your tiptoes
like your little girl shoes were on
pretending to be tall enough
to look in those windows there

you turned too quickly for my eyes
and caught me looking down
and there too, more slowly
but I noticed your smile after

and how you wrote submission down
in the warm sand by your sighs
then erased it part of the way
leaving just enough for me to know

your answers would all be woman sounds


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daark


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JerryPat2
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1 posted 2011-05-05 09:34 AM


What's wrong with me? I'm understanding your poetry more and more. At least I think I do, please don't burst my bubble and say I don't.

Yes, they notice that downward look and soon, if the stars are aligned correctly, they do began those women sounds.

~ I went to a restaurant that serves "breakfast at any time" / I ordered French Toast during the Renaissance. ~

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2011-05-05 12:20 PM


JP..scary huh...thanks guy.
OwlSA
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3 posted 2011-05-05 12:22 PM


Enchanting, Dark.

Owl

dreamgal
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4 posted 2011-05-05 01:08 PM


A very sensous read, at least thats what i got from it. But i enjoyed it! lol

Dreamgal

Dark Stranger
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5 posted 2011-05-05 01:36 PM


lady Owl, thank you lady

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dreamgal, thank you for the read ms

devina
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Cali
6 posted 2011-05-05 02:03 PM


You are ever soft sighs, man...enjoyed and glad to find you still here!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



Sunshine
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7 posted 2011-05-05 04:51 PM


Having to smile at JP's response....

what a woman knows, is seen....

what a man knows....

is sometimes a quiet secret.

And yes, even those who might not respond, but only read?

Yes, they will smile, too.


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8 posted 2011-05-06 02:00 AM


I looked out the window, listened to a breeze and I smiled.

Ali-san

Margherita
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9 posted 2011-05-06 04:23 AM


You elicit the most passionate tunes in every woman's heart with your outstanding, sensuous, yet delicate sigh song poems such as this one.

You are the Master.

Love,
Margherita

Dark Stranger
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10 posted 2011-05-06 07:02 AM


ms dinina, thank you lady!!

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ms sun, grinning here..thanks much babe

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ms ali-san, arrigoto oatmeal

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ms mar, thank you sweet lady for the glances

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