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JerryPat2
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0 posted 2011-04-05 09:38 PM


darkness can set in
without you
realizing it
without a warning
it isn't like the flu
your bones doesn't begin to ache
or sniffles begin
but there it is
like a heavy dark cloud
in its arrogant and omnipresent
takeover of your mind
sucking tendrils
of reality
from the cerebrum
can madness be far behind


~ If you don't want gays in the military, make the uniforms ugly. ~

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Margherita
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1 posted 2011-04-06 05:20 AM


Dear Jerry, I understand this very effective write. It does happen just like this, like a sudden storm one didn't expect. But we need to keep in mind that "dark clouds" are bound to pass and meanwhile we can at least try to focus on the memory of the light.

If you refer to the progressive mental darkness and decay then it becomes really frightening. It is so painful to see it in others we love and something we intensely hope will never affect us personally.

Thank you for this thought provoking piece.

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

JerryPat2
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2 posted 2011-04-06 07:40 AM


Margherita, you are a sweetie and thank you very much for your optimistic thoughts on this poem. Sometimes these moods, or whatever you can them, can certainly be scary though.

~ If you don't want gays in the military, make the uniforms ugly. ~

dreamgal
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3 posted 2011-04-06 07:42 AM


This is very true Jerry, great write, conveying it extremly well.

Dreamgal

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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4 posted 2011-04-06 08:36 AM


Been there, been there, been there, and it can make your body physically hurt.  Wish I didn't know all that stuff...but I'm much better now
jwesley
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5 posted 2011-04-06 08:43 AM


Well written about that which many doctors and drug companies make a huge amount of money under the guise of 'depression'.  A real, painful and debilitating experience for many (thank goodness not me thus far).

j.

JerryPat2
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6 posted 2011-04-06 08:50 AM


Appreciate you being here and commenting, dreamgal. Thanks.

Yes, Lori, it is not a new thing, it just feels like it when it come home to roost.

You are absolutely correct, J., about the drug companies. They like to give "impressive" names to these afflictions of ours and make themselves right and most people buy into it. I know it is temporary with me, although I understand there are "some"" people it is a real problem for. Thank you for your input this morning.

~ If you don't want gays in the military, make the uniforms ugly. ~

steavenr
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7 posted 2011-04-06 10:37 PM


loved the lines:

"sucking tendrils
of reality
from the cerebrum"

and the answer to "can madness be far behind" is perchance...

JerryPat2
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8 posted 2011-04-06 10:42 PM


Hah! Perchance is good enough for me. Where my Ativan? Thanks, steavenr.

~ If you don't want gays in the military, make the uniforms ugly. ~

Spiros Zafiris
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9 posted 2011-04-07 05:44 AM


..indeed, even a gloomy topic is interesting
to read if Jerry has written it..>>spiros

serenity blaze
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10 posted 2011-04-07 06:00 AM


And some times? It's just night time.

I tease you a bit.

Just a bit, though.

Dark days indeed...I share your glumz.

*hugs*

JerryPat2
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11 posted 2011-04-07 07:11 AM


Spiros, I thank you, your comment has gotten my day off to a nice start. Appreciate it.

Yea, Serenity, you're right, it was probably just time for it to get dark. I guess maybe I complain a little too much. There's always a bright side to write about. I'll try to find.

~ If you don't want gays in the military, make the uniforms ugly. ~

Honeybunch
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12 posted 2011-04-07 10:19 AM


Hi Jerry, I know someone who suddenly gets dark moments for no apparent reason but with  the knowledge that it is temporary she is able to live through them much easier.  It would take a better brain than mine to understand why but me being me I'd say they could result from an intuitive "pick-up" from the ... ether.  Just say it isn't yours and shrug it off - can't hurt.  

Helen

JerryPat2
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13 posted 2011-04-07 10:23 AM


Helen, a wise sage are you. I agree with you, it's just that sometimes, when it first comes, it surprises you so you don't think properly. I'm getting a handle on it. I know now where it came from and am dealing with it. You are nice and thank you.

~ If you don't want gays in the military, make the uniforms ugly. ~

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