Homesick - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

martiniat8
Senior Member

since 2003-06-21

Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

0 posted 2011-03-06 05:26 PM

Homesick

People often ask me if I miss home
and I never know quite what to say

and now I think of...

Those many nights I stood alone
on the top of some high place

watching a thunderstorm
God's greatest display of power

a cloud ten miles high
from tip to toe
lit up in a violent brilliant show

violet, orange, blue and green
the hot wind before the rain
the cool breeze following it, again

chasing the storm
standing in a field
those wide Texas plains
my trusty car by my side

taking me there
everywhere

so yes, yes, I miss those nights

but here I gaze upon a woman
God's greatest display of beauty
and love

mystery
and how a man hangs like a fool,
on her every word
her gaze

would I trade those thunderstorms
for her touch, her eyes

I am that tempest
in body and soul

and only time will tell...

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2011-03-06 08:19 PM

Wow! And you left Texas???

Go back, young man, go back....

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2011-03-07 12:19 PM

ah, if I could gaze upon a certain man, I might be homesick. Good thing I took no pictures.

beautiful write!

EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

3 posted 2011-03-07 08:54 AM

the lush landscape of your expression fits the mood of the poet beautifully

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2011-03-07 10:07 AM

I think this is one of my favorites of yours. The Texas tempest..sounds like when you finally get lucky, she will be even luckier

Lori

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

5 posted 2011-03-07 04:15 PM

Very beautiful.

Owl

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2011-03-07 06:39 PM

Wonderful...James

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

7 posted 2011-03-07 08:22 PM

you've summed it up well with this one line:

"I am that tempest" nice write

Nareena
Member

since 2011-02-17

Posts 51
BC, Canada

8 posted 2011-03-08 11:38 PM

Enjoyed very much

Thank you for sharing this!

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

9 posted 2011-03-09 02:33 PM

hello martiniat, I love the two sides of your poem, the two storms and the deductions of feelings they induce...It is well crafted and very well done...

yann

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.