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Spiros Zafiris
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0 posted 2011-02-19 02:30 PM


as soon as the stars
rained down their glory,
her intense eyes
adopted a fawnlike demeanor
and he suggested more such walks
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..from 2009; Copyright 2011 Spiros Zafiris
..channeled; spirit Harmony
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Sunshine
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1 posted 2011-02-19 02:36 PM


I certainly hope she follows up
on the suggestion.
I think I enjoyed this because
we do have several deer that walk
around in the evenings, and of
course I know they are around
when it snows...their tracks
are everywhere.

But...the imagery was sparkling.

Thank you!

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (02-19-2011 03:54 PM).]

OwlSA
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2 posted 2011-02-19 02:53 PM


Wow, Spiros – this is to die for!  I just KNOW that she was only to eager for more walks! I love this to bits.

Owl

Spiros Zafiris
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3 posted 2011-02-19 03:02 PM


..oh, Sunshine and Owl..you are both
so kind

..spiros
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Alison
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4 posted 2011-02-19 03:04 PM


The stars were so bright last night - I can see them raining  upon her. Beautiful.

A

Spiros Zafiris
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5 posted 2011-02-19 08:26 PM


..thanks Alison..>>much appreciate your having read and your comment..>>spiros
JerryPat2
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6 posted 2011-02-19 08:28 PM


I can quite understand why more such walks would be the thing to do. Nice work.

In the 60's, people took acid to make the world weird. Now the world is weird and people take Prozac to make it normal.

Nareena
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7 posted 2011-02-19 09:04 PM


VERY enjoyable! Both the poem and the walk! Thank you for sharing
Lori Grosser Rhoden
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8 posted 2011-02-19 09:22 PM


lovely and a delightful read. Very much enjoyed.
Lori

Spiros Zafiris
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9 posted 2011-02-19 09:33 PM


..Jerry, Nareena, and Lori..>>i am grateful
for all your kind words..>spiros

katahdin
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10 posted 2011-02-19 10:37 PM


Just beautiful, enjoyed!
Kat >^..^<

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To love is to live

Spiros Zafiris
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11 posted 2011-02-20 02:13 AM


..thank you Kat..>>it pleases me you enjoyed the tanka..

..>>spiros
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