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Spiros Zafiris
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since 2002-10-20
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Canada

0 posted 2011-02-13 09:44 PM


persistently,
the hermit writes and writes
a beneficial outcome
circled its request; now,
a balm, each word, he offers
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..Copyright 2011 Spiros Zafiris
..channeled; spirit Ram;
reaching into the poet's heart
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faithmairee
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since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA
1 posted 2011-02-13 09:54 PM


very profound and finely penned...enjoyed it much!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
2 posted 2011-02-13 10:07 PM


I see him now. Hunched over a makeshift desk, candle burnt almost down to nothing. Wispy air around the sides of his head, bald on top. Quill poised over parchment paper, tongue pushed between his bearded mouth. I see all this and know the hermit is going to pen something profound. In his eyes, it will be profound.

~~ All those who believe in telekinesis, raise my hand ~~

Spiros Zafiris
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since 2002-10-20
Posts 982
Canada
3 posted 2011-02-13 10:25 PM


..thanks faithmairee..>>you're very kind

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..Jerry, amusing man, thanks for commenting
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..spiros
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OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
4 posted 2011-02-14 02:36 PM


Hauntingly exquisite - I see this in the form of a scene from a French art movie - with the camera moving slowly over every aspect of his face and showing various textures around the room in shades of old gold and rich browns.  I believe the hermit’s writing will not be in vain.

Owl

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