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steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

0 posted 2011-01-20 05:01 PM

night shades shed their wisp-laden shadows
sultry soft in slivers of evening cast-a-ways
lovers entwined in cyclical embrace
undulating heart-dances palpitate a medley

of quiet-song melodies whispered in low voices
muting ear drizzles of noiseless dispositions
baring solitudes of loneliness in communal display
revealing ambiances of auditory delight

spoken in hushed tones that only night’s negligee elucidates
caressing the dust-brushings of dusk’s dark mistiness
settling in crevasses of discreet disarray
mingling the toil of night’s glistening shard-props

while the tentacles of night-mists twist
on rivulets of stillness-draped musings
in cloud-circles of haze

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2011-01-20 05:59 PM

Steaven, the first two lines
are killer!

Thank you!

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2011-01-20 06:24 PM

Beautiful evening to draw the shades. although the full moon last night was magical.

really nice writing, steavenr~

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

3 posted 2011-01-21 02:40 AM

I think you're one of the masters of metaphors, similies and the odd hyperbole.

This one made me smile and I love the image.
"cyclical embrace"

Great wording, images with a pondering mystique.

Eric

two maggots were fighting in dead earnest!

Bastet
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since 2010-05-07

Posts 246

4 posted 2011-01-21 02:46 AM

Ahhh... sound, rhythm, atmosphere and beautiful imagery. A poet after my own heart. A real pleasure to read.

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

5 posted 2011-01-21 10:00 AM

Sunshine, wow…thank you…almost re-wrote that second line because I feared it would not flow well over the tongue…glad you liked it

Ida, you are so gracious with your kind comments…I owe you many thanks

Eric, my, my…high praise kind sir…thank you (and thank you for noticing that phrase)

Bastet, many thanks…went back and read some of your work to get acquainted with “your own heart.” Sorry that I missed it before…good stuff

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

6 posted 2011-01-21 01:21 PM

muy cool steavenr...enjoyed the view here

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