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2islander2
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0 posted 2009-10-08 02:06 PM


I say it to you,
the danger is there,
in her eyes of coal
and between her round bosoms ,
I say it to you,
the danger is there,
in her youth
which crushes what looks like her ,
in this wind of improbable kisses
which blows on her dreams,
I say it to you,
the danger is in the spirit
which welcomes and annuls
hopes and hesitations,
in her sky which extends as a net
over the freedom to believe
that she loves you,
she captures you,
here is the danger.

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Robert E. Jordan
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1 posted 2009-10-08 02:11 PM


Yo Yann,

You have it right, don't get captured.  This is a neat poem.

Bobby

Margherita
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2 posted 2009-10-08 04:57 PM


quote:
in her sky which extends as a net
over the freedom to believe
that she loves you,



Dear Yann, how well you caught this kind of danger! You say it to you? But that's a great warning for many, though it is almost never taken seriously, as the consequences show!

Once entangled in the net, it is usually too late ...

Love,
Margherita

JamesMichael
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3 posted 2009-10-08 07:07 PM


Enjoyed...James
Marchmadness
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4 posted 2009-10-09 03:05 AM


Well, at least you know what to look out for, yann and you,ve expressed it very well.
                                 Ida

2islander2
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5 posted 2009-10-09 03:39 AM


thank you bobby for understanding and supportive comment.

have a nice day

yann

2islander2
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6 posted 2009-10-09 03:41 AM


Hello Margherita, thanks for the comment, may it  helps some but it is difficult to react when you are quite hypnotized.

have  a nice day

yann

2islander2
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7 posted 2009-10-09 03:42 AM


thank you James, I am glad you enjoyed.

yann

2islander2
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8 posted 2009-10-09 03:42 AM


Ida, thanks for the comment, I take care.

yann

martiniat8
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9 posted 2009-10-09 03:54 AM


"here is the danger"

that says it all

great read

Rick
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10 posted 2009-10-09 06:19 PM


I very much enjoyed this and the meaning it brings, well done my friend.

Rick

brneyedgrly
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11 posted 2009-10-10 12:20 PM



I think this is my favorite of yours

but I do like those 'door' poems too




2islander2
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12 posted 2009-10-11 04:03 AM


thanks martiniat for the warm words.

regards
yann

2islander2
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13 posted 2009-10-11 04:04 AM


thanks Rick, and hello to australia, I crave for traveling there when I will retire.

yann

2islander2
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14 posted 2009-10-11 04:05 AM


thanks a lot shellie, your words touched me, i am glad you like the poem.

regards

yann

hafrock
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15 posted 2009-10-11 10:16 AM


Well indeed the dangers portrayed..loved reading it
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16 posted 2009-10-11 03:22 PM


I say it to you

I really enjoy your poetry
and think you are
becoming stronger
with each poem you share.

I say it to you

Thank you,
Alison

Bill Charles
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17 posted 2009-10-11 03:55 PM


Yann - like your words in this writing, so true they are...

BC

2islander2
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18 posted 2009-10-13 01:09 PM


thanks afrock for the supportive comment.

yann

2islander2
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19 posted 2009-10-13 01:09 PM


thanks Alison,

bisous from france.

yann

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20 posted 2009-10-13 01:11 PM


thanks bill for the read and comment.

regards

yann

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