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precious pearls Member
since 2009-07-24
Posts 110NJ; United States |
Hate Rage burns inside me I do not see clearly For hate blinds me Reason ceases to exist As hate twists All around in my heart Logic doesn’t mean anything What more destruction Can hate bring? It destroys you Until you have nothing left With loneliness all around Contaminating your mind and heart Spreading through and through And tearing you apart Always, |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Welcome to Pip, precious pearls! This is so true! I know all about the anger. Even to this day, I still deal with anger. Anger can do a lot of damage. That is why I have worked at getting rid of it. |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Cheer up, pearly  This was a good first write. I want to make you a deal. If you write a poem about a frog, I will. Don't pay me any mind, I'm just weird.  I love my dog, and my truck. It's that simple, really. |
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Penwing Member
since 2009-07-27
Posts 73Waverly, MN |
welcome to pip! i think this is a great first write. (not that i would know much seeing as i am just a junior member myself hahaha) i think you did a wonderful job describing the feeling of hate. when i think of it thats exactly how i feel awesome job, ,Penwing |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Precious Pearls, welcome to PIP, you will like it here. The only thing about your poem that I didn't like is the subject you are writing about. If you free your mind from hate, you will be a whole lot happier, for hate is one thing that will destroy you. Be happy, put a smile on your face and you will feel so much better, I guarantee it. Lindsay |
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precious pearls Member
since 2009-07-24
Posts 110NJ; United States |
Lol, thanks guys... It actually had nothing to do with me! I just wrote it because I was playing a game with some people in a chat room, and one person had to say a title and we all had to write a poem about that title... But thanks for the comments pplz... Always, |
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